Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Asylum Project, Mar 31, 2010.

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  1. Asylum Project

    Asylum Project Well-Known Member

    this is more of a rap then poetry but o well

    People call me a free runner
    Hardcore gun people for fun runner
    I be packing dem 50 cal burners,
    Would be wise to stay away or die
    Try and ask the guy that ant fucking breathing
    You can get scareed you better be leaving,You say your packing heat you just
    bring a knife to this gun fight,
    pop 1,2, ******s I kill a few, pop 4,5 I I have that killing high,
    Ant no one messing with me man, dangererious man, when people stand a round me me.
    Life and these set backs take a swing make a
  2. Tobes

    Tobes Well-Known Member

    It's a good rap, but it's terribly stereotypical. Hundreds of rappers have said essentially what you just said. I know the rap game is all about bragging about murder and drugs and the rest (which is fucking lame), but you can still make a rap with original content. Surely you have something better to say.

    Still, it's a good rap with a good flow. I wouldn't mind hearing more.

    EDIT: I've read your other raps, they are a lot better than this one in my opinion, simply because you aren't rapping about killing people. Not that this one isn't good, just that this kind of rap is so overused and played, it's hard to make it sound good saying the same thing as other rappers. Keep on posting your raps, they are good, and you get the message across quite well.
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  3. Asylum Project

    Asylum Project Well-Known Member

    thanks you for feed back
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