A Poem that Hardly Rhymes

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  1. Tahiti

    Tahiti Well-Known Member

    A Poem that Hardly Rhymes


    So I'll be obstinate
    See, it's working out for me
    Don't you agree?
    These suppressed emotions
    These thoughts, these hollow words
    Echo endlessly deep into the meaningless void

    Bubbling up to the surface
    Revealing itself once again

    Can birds comprehend why the sky is blue?
    No, all they can do is soar in it
    Can trees ever hope to move on the ground?
    No, their roots travel too far down

    So tell me why the caged birds sing
    And tell me why the trees are so lofty
    So tell me why I'm so confused
    And tell me why I should be living

    Feed me the lies
    I want to hear them again
    So god and this and future and that
    And all the things that can go right
    So jesus and this and hope and that
    And all the things that can go wrong

    So why does black turn to white in negative?
    Is it possible to reverse these situations?
    So why is the cross so beautiful
    When it represents pain and hardship?

    Show me
    Tell me
    Explain to me
    In thousands of useless, empty words
    Based on arbitrary thoughts and feelings
    Or monotonous logic-driven gusto
    Why are we all here?

    The world looks so beautiful in the black, glittering void
    Spring green surface, water the color of teal
    The world seems so lovely so far away
    Yet up-close you'll see what is real

    I want to be fed lies filled with cunning
    I want to believe in the impossible
    So tell me show me explain to me lie to me
    And tell me that life is worth living
     
  2. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I think your life is worth living, and that's no lie. I care about you, and that's no lie. I believe that as long as there's life, there's hope - and that's no lie.


    love,

    least

    and I like your poem also.:smile:
     
  3. I really love this - the deliberate, in-your-face, bold questioning. I also love the nature imagery - and that trees and birds do not question. It shows what hard work it is being a human being, and how we too often feel removed/separate from this living world. You portrayed it very succinctly. Great, daring, powerful stuff...

    As for the lies, it's always been easier and more convenient to swallow what's being fed, instead of exploring for oneself. This too, is hard work and takes tremendous guts...

    FAL1
     
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  4. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    Good poem...I am privaledged to have been able to read that......:hug:
     
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