A Poetic Rant

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Shiroi_Hana, Feb 18, 2009.

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  1. Shiroi_Hana

    Shiroi_Hana Well-Known Member

    Observe me, here; presently,
    this humbled, shackled lump of skinless thought which, like branches, grows and reaches without master nor purpose.
    See how, anxious, head trapped beneath sour waves of forced expectation and spilt disappointments, how bitterly do I vomit incoherently myriad torments.
    White pages poisoned by my mediocrity and amateur, unpolished and coarsest vanities.
    Look you how I struggle thus, this insect wriggling angrily beneath
    the tightened, cracking grasp of my own hypocrisy.
    It chokes me.
    "Wretch! Villain!" cries the mirror, laughing out at me from a distant reality,
    teasing and grasping, slicing at my delicate reason.
    My mind has caught fire.
    Yet, how can I, inconsequential as I am,
    as humans are, presume to know pain?
    Oh, but I do.
    That growling, vicious beast who plagues our peace and turns our hearts sour
    as spoiled fruits in winter!
    Yes, many times has pain dined at my table, been my release
    and my disgrace.
    Pain-- that despised, unwelcome guest whose deeds nonetheless
    result in our humanity.
    Observe me now, this rumpled, shivering shell.
    Are you so very different than me?
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    The imagery is wonderful! I like how you tied in the theme of fruits, dining, guest...Well done!
  3. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    I love the passion and the anger.

    I also love your signature and your avatar image.

  4. Shiroi_Hana

    Shiroi_Hana Well-Known Member

    Thanks a bunch to you both for the positive comments! :biggrin: I appreciate it!
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