A present for user '~violet~' *hugs and smiles*

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  1. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

    A better 21st in the stars

    My mother dreams 'yond pearls and tears:
    Walls and glass of eight.
    A cat - :tiger: no claws - with hedgehog fur;
    The 29th ghost too late.

    'Twixt injections, there's too much need.
    Try'n' to figure undreamy 21st's.
    To anim'l park - sweet! Follow her lead.
    Caged eve' when friends' laughter bursts.

    All dazzlin' dreams art for me.
    All her fears she fights 'til flee.
    And eve' when I just scream and bleed,
    She reassures - gives life indeed.

    On the morrow the sun will shine.
    'Til then wish shadows and stars.
    Many clocks and jewels that art mine.
    Shame most art dreams; broke' jars...


    21 lines - special girl in dusk.
    Empty to eager, broke' twins to Twilight.
    Dungeon to dancing, FUBAR - fulfilled tasks.
    Cold rain in resolution, blue days...

    Happy nights!

     
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  2. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

    This poem is copyrighted to DrivEthermissIon. It may not be reproduced by any other party other than the user ~violet~ at this forum, who has unrestricted use of it.


     
  3. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

  4. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

    2nd edit

    A better 21st in the stars

    My mother dreams 'yond pearls and tears:
    Walls and glass of eight.
    A cat - :tiger: no claws - with hedgehog fur;
    The 29th ghost too late.

    'Twixt injections, there's too much need.
    Try'n' to figure undreamy 21st's.
    To anim'l park - sweet! Follow her lead.
    Caged eve' when friends' laughter bursts.

    All dazzlin' dreams art for me.
    All her fears she fights 'til flee.
    And eve' when I just scream and bleed,
    She reassures - gives life indeed.

    On the morrow the sun will shine.
    'Til then wish shadows and stars.
    Many clocks and jewels that art mine.
    Shame most art dreams; broke' jars...

    21 lines - special girl in dusk.
    Empty to eager, broke' twins to Twilight.
    Dungeon to dancing, FUBAR - fulfilled tasks.
    Iced rain - resolved, blue days...

    Happy nights!










    I edited the 20th line.
     
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  5. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

    Edited the 20th line again. Final edit complete. :)
     
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  6. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

    Okay - a few errors - final FINAL edit ;) - 3rd edit

    A better 21st in the stars

    My mother dreams 'yond pearls and tears:
    Walls and glass of eight.
    A cat - :tiger: no claws - with hedgehog fur;
    The 29th ghost too late.

    'Twixt injections, there's too much need.
    Try'n' to figure undreamy 21st's.
    To an'mal park - sweet! Follow her lead.
    Caged eve' when friends' laughter bursts.

    All dazzlin' dreams art for me.
    All her fears she fights 'til flee.
    And eve' when I just scream and bleed,
    She reassures - gives life indeed.

    On the morrow the sun will shine.
    'Til then wish shadows and stars.
    Many clocks and jewels that art mine.
    Shame most art dreams; broke' jars...

    21 lines - special girl in dusk.
    Empty to eager; broke' twins to Twilight;
    Dungeon to dancing; FUBAR - fulfilled tasks;
    Iced rain - resolved; blue days...

    Happy nights!
















    Corrected the word 'animal' and added a few semi-colons.
     
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  7. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Thank you for such a special gift You indeed have a poet soul I love poetry but lost the want to write anymore. Thank you i will print it and keep it to read often take care and keep writing Your gift gives meaning to others.
     
  8. DrivEthermissIon

    DrivEthermissIon Banned Member

    You're welcome Violet.

    I'm a bit lost for words, I don't know what to say, I don't know what is happening to me ^__^ .

    I'll go to bed now.
     
  9. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I hope the rest makes you feel better as often when i am overtired i feel confused and unsure of myself. Thanks for thinking of me and i do hope your feeling better if not give you doc a call okay let know what going on.
     
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