Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by hopeful_changes, Jun 11, 2013.

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  1. I wrote this a few months ago when I was going through a really rough time.

    Thanks for reading.


    He stares through the fog of his own mind,
    Looking into a deep abyss of confusion.
    Drifting among the current.
    Hands grab at him from every direction.
    Scratching... Clawing.
    Tearing away at the fabric of his sanity.

    He does nothing to defend himself.

    His limbs pull away,
    Separating at the joints.
    His memories pour from the tearing flesh,
    and disappear into the surrounding haze.

    He is thankful.

    He feels nothing but tranquility.
    His eyes close as he lets it take him.
    He falls apart, carried into nothing,
    Embracing the sense of bliss,
    and giving himself to it, Forever.
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    interesting your writing the way you use your words to create a image of your sanity
  3. JMG

    JMG Well-Known Member

    Wow great poem I agree w/ total eclipse very interesting way of writing. I love the tearing away at the fabric of his sanity line for sure I can so relate to feeling that way.
    PS- I noticed your join date says this month so just wanted to say welcome also :) I'm Jenn.
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