Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by rpiccola89, Jul 16, 2008.

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  1. rpiccola89

    rpiccola89 Member

    I wrote this a couple months ago; tell me whatcha think :smile:


    The sky is frozen
    The moon is dead
    The flesh ripped open
    The blood is red
    The tears frozen over
    The thirst is quenched
    The voice is silenced
    The fists stay clenched
    The body decays
    The crime goes unsolved
    The revenge has been taken
    The anger resolved
  2. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I think it is quite good!:smile:
  3. Terry

    Terry Antiquities Friend Staff Alumni

    I like it tho it feels as if it could go on and become a sort of story poem..if that makes sense. :unsure:
    I was kind of waiting for the next bit.
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    i like it:smile:
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