Beautiful Destruction

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  1. Descendant

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    A tide of madness rises
    Caressing quiet shores
    Malign winds that follow
    Whisper secrets in open ears
    Making them so very sore

    What it suggests is heresy
    Filling those blessed with grief
    But it gnaws at my fingers
    At my ears
    And I must have relief

    The solemn man on the boat
    Hands me a weapon of siege
    Make me a wrecked paradise
    He whispers in my ear
    And it starts to bleed

    I start silently my task
    Cleaving from existence
    Hope and love
    Flesh and bone
    All that used to be

    Awe flows from eyes undead
    Filling the ashen seas
    Disgust flows from mortal souls
    Filling an empty hell
    For hell has risen
    To create such beautiful destruction for me

    This one of the first poems I ever wrote, enjoy. Constructive criticism is welcomed.
     
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  2. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    Hmm, I can't think of anything in terms of constructive criticism, because I really enjoyed the poem. I think it is very well-written and flows well. Hope to read more of your poems in the future!
     
  3. Descendant

    Descendant Account Closed

    Thanks Christy, I appreciate it. Sadly almost my entire collection of poems was lost when my last computer died, this and one other were the only 2 that survived and I just lost my motivation to write after that but I've been thinking about starting up again. I'll post the other one soon and maybe come up with something new. :)
     
  4. Baldr

    Baldr Moderator Staff Member Safety & Support

    Really like the poem as well
    also love your fluttershy pic :)
     
  5. Descendant

    Descendant Account Closed

    Thank you on both, it's nice to see another brony on here there can never be enough.
     
  6. youRprecious!

    youRprecious! Antiquities Friend

    You're an amazing poet Des - but I cannot think there is anything beautiful about destruction..... it's something that I hate.

    p.s. what is a brony?
     
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  7. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    Oh that sucks, sorry to hear that. That's good that you are thinking of starting up again. I hope your inspiration will come back to you soon. :)
     
  8. Baldr

    Baldr Moderator Staff Member Safety & Support

    a brony is a person who likes my little pony friendship is magic
     
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