Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by The_Discarded, Apr 18, 2008.

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  1. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    T ime to unravel! My
    H ead spins on its axis like something out of "The
    E xorcist."

    B reathing quickens and I'm
    O verwhelmed, overwrought, overused, overdone. I
    T ouch the air with my gaze,
    T ell my eyes not to cry (count from 10 to one...)
    L et my pulse slow and then,
    E ver-suddenly, my soul
    UNDERSTANDS why my mind moves like a fan,
    B reaking records of speed. You were never
    E xactly in my hierarchy of needs.
    S o, lifting the mouth of the bottle to mine, I
    T ake a sip, watch the time... to unravel.
  2. Spearmint

    Spearmint Well-Known Member

    I like this, Raeface. Be safe though, homie.
  3. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni


    this poem is pretty cool!

    i like the words, yo
  4. ~PinkElephants~

    ~PinkElephants~ Senior member

    this poem is excellent. the imagery is amazing.:hug:
  5. Sa Palomera

    Sa Palomera Well-Known Member

    It's beautiful Rae, this poem.
    Me likes the wording and that it doesn't like.. it's like different, or something..

    :hug: Be safe :hug:
  6. danni

    danni Chat Buddy

    :hug: very well written poem hun be safe rae :hug:
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