Bonez Poetry

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  1. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    How can i make a change
    wen i cant seem 2 rearrange
    the mess dats ma
    all da pain an strife
    in da blink of a second
    it can all jus end
    witout warnin jus cave in
    notify da nex of kin
    only wen uve bin round da block
    dat u seem 2 lock da world out
     
  2. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    An Anotha (sum of dese may trigger so b carefull)

    As I turn an walk away
    I seem 2 wana say
    fuck u all i hate u all
    u made me fall
    i keep on walkin
    close ma mouth 2 stop talkin
    as soon as im far away
    tearz start 2 form in ma eyez
    all ma thought r of death
    im tryna catch ma breath
    but it wont let me
     
  3. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    More Of My Poetry TRIGGER!!


    I look in2 ur eyes
    an all i see is hatered
    Neva thou wulda have thought ud hit me
    strangle den slap me
    this isnt wot i want
    yet i still stay an ill b bak
    knockin at da door
    waitin wonderin
    wens da next slap cumin
    Yet u say ull neva do it again
    I dont even kno hu u r no more
     
  4. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    More again. May Trigger

    Same Shit diffrent day
    every1 got summit 2 say
    but dey dont kno wot its like
    livin dis life
    gettin up an gettin knocked bak down
    i dont wanna b here i wanna leave
    itz all 2 much
    aint no such
    thing as gettin beta
    rainy dayz gettin wetter
    thunderstormz stayin around
    I jus wanna go underground
    neva 2 b found :sad:
     
  5. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    Re: Bonez Poetry Sum of dese may trigger

    More trigger


    Death is da end itz final
    can neva cum bak
    layin on ma bak
    6ft under in a coffin
    not even da smartest boffin
    can understand da depressed
    im jus mental sayz da mental health profession
    had enough of da neva endin session
    fightin everyfink dat is wrong
    lookin 2 da sky
    wonderin y no mata how hard i try
    it seemz 2 end like dis
    itz not wot i wanna do
    ive throught it throu
    dese past weeks an dayz
    i dont kno how 2 put it
    i jus wanna quit
    quit dis life
    fed up of usin a knife
    2 get me out da struggle
    itz all 2 long
    2 rite dese wrongs
    id rather b dead
    ive gone ahead an said
    how i feel itz not gonna work
    me bein here no more
    wots it all 4
    i give in wit dis game
    dats called life
    im goin ova it in ma mind
    an i cant help but find
    im lookin 4ward 2 da end
    gettin away from all dis shit :sad:
     
  6. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    May Trigger



    I fink about wen itz gonna happen
    jus knowin wen an where get me thoru da day
    i kno itz not gona b long
    till da day comes
    wen da grim reaper calls
    ill answer his ca;;
    an jus fall
    in2 a bottomless pitt
    ive hit rock bottom
    i kno im gonna die
    yet i aint sad
    actually glad
    i cant help feelin
    dat im lettin ma demonz
    get da beta of me
    alot of unanswered questions need answers
    i dont wanna chance dis
    im makin da rite choice
    fed up wit finkin every nite
    not doin anyfink rite
    thinkin bout cuttin wot da fuck
    i aint supposed 2 b like dis
    im lost run out of places 2 hide
    it now or neva
    die now an end it 4eva
    pused 2 da point of no return
    wrong or right
    im endin dis life:sad:
     
  7. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    An anotha

    Starin up at da sky
    screamin wonderin y
    i cant b der wit u
    u was da only 1 hu
    i culd turn 2
    not ma real dad
    but u still cared
    i culd neva have prepared
    4 da day u died
    i neva cried so much
    5 dayz after my eighteen bday
    no words can say
    how i felt wen i saw u layin dere
    itz like a nightmare
    i neva even got 2 say bye
    still dunno y u had 2 die
    itz nearly a yr
    an it still aint clear
    tryna figure it all out
    den i relaise ur neva comin bak :sad:

    R.I.P Dad 30 October 1960 -8 November 2006
     
  8. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    More poetry


    Itz bin nearly a yr
    an im still wipin away a tear
    tryna cope wit da grief
    aint wantin 2 belive ur gone
    still memba last time i saw u
    itz gonna haunt ma dreamz 4 life
    seein u dere losin ur fite 4 life
    an im supposed 2 keep fightin
    itz feelz like ive bin struck by lightin
    jus so numb from da pain
    give anyfink 2 go bak in time
    lemme kno everyfinks gonna b fine
    missin u daily time cant heal
    jus how im feelin
     
  9. Nessa Doll

    Nessa Doll Member

    Ohhh Hun you have gotta get some helps pls you need to tell somebody whats going on this has to stop!! I want you to be ok again!! :hug: Love Nessa
     
  10. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    Your content is actually very good. The imagery is fairly vivid and, obviously, these are heartfelt.

    I am bit of an old duffer and a language purist so I find the 'text speak' style a little off-putting. I think your writing ability deserves to be correctly written.

    Dat's jus me, innit :wink:

    Moments.
     
  11. LostMyMind

    LostMyMind Well-Known Member

    I find your poetry difficult to read.
     
  12. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    Thank u 4 ur comments, an sori if its hard 2 read, i dont really understand 1 of the comments but ill get dere, thank u again :hug:



    May Trigger


    STEADY LOOKIN AT DA SKY
    WONDERIN Y
    I GOT 2 WERE IM AT
    BIN HERE 2 MANY TIMEZ B4
    IM SEEIN ITZ NOTHIN WORTH FIGHTIN 4
    GIVIN IN NOTHIN MORE
    IS EXPECTED IVE REACHED DA BOTTOM
    OF THE PILE
    WORKIN MA WAY DOWN
    STUCK HERE FAST
    DERES JUS 1 LAST,
    FING LEFT 2 DO LIVE FINALLY FOUND MA WAY
    DERE JUS AINT NOTHIN MORE 2 SAY
    DIS IS MA LIFE
    AN IM TAKIN IT
    AINT NEED NO PERMISSON 4 DAT
    AN DATZ A MATA OF FACT!! :mad:
     
  13. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    Please b aware these may trigger,


    SAT LOOKIN AROUND
    TRYNA FIGURE OUT HOW I HIT DA GROUND
    YET NO ANSWER CAN B FOUND
    SLOWLY FIGURIN OUT DIS LIFE IS GRIM
    MY CHANCES OF SURVIVAL R SLIM
    READY 2 CALL 4 DA GRIM REAPER
    TELL HIM HE'S FOUND A KEEPER
    IM READY 2 GO
    JUS LEMME B ABLE 2 SHOW
    U DA INSIDE OF MA MIND
    ITZ ALL PLANNED OUT
    AINT NOTHIN LEFT 2 WORK OUT
    I JUS WANNA LEAVE
    SO HEAR ME PLEASE
    AINT NOTHIN LEFT 4 ME HERE
    CEPT LIVIN A LIFE OF FEAR
    NAH DATS NOT ME NO MORE
    IM GIVIN UP JUS COME GET ME
    IM READY 4 REAPER! :sad:
     
  14. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    STEADY LOOKIN AT DA SKY
    Bonez,

    this is what people are talking about. See the difference between these versions.

    Wondering why
    I got to where I'm at
    Been here too many times before
    I'm seeing it's nothing
    worth fighting for
    Giving in, nothing more
    is expected
    I've reached the bottom
    of the pile
    Working my way down,
    stuck here fast,
    there's just one last thing
    left to do:
    live finally, found my way
    there just ain't nothing
    more to say
    this is my life
    and I'm taking it
    don't need no permission for that
    and that's a matter
    of fact.


    WONDERIN Y
    I GOT 2 WERE IM AT
    BIN HERE 2 MANY TIMEZ B4
    IM SEEIN ITZ NOTHIN WORTH FIGHTIN 4
    GIVIN IN NOTHIN MORE
    IS EXPECTED IVE REACHED DA BOTTOM
    OF THE PILE
    WORKIN MA WAY DOWN
    STUCK HERE FAST
    DERES JUS 1 LAST,
    FING LEFT 2 DO LIVE FINALLY FOUND MA WAY
    DERE JUS AINT NOTHIN MORE 2 SAY
    DIS IS MA LIFE
    AN IM TAKIN IT
    AINT NEED NO PERMISSON 4 DAT
    AN DATZ A MATA OF FACT

    I hope you're ok. I DO like your writing but I think you do yourself an injustice with the style you choose.
     
  15. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    untitiled

    May TRIGGER


    MA HEADZ SPINNIN
    ALL DA DEMONZ ROUND ME R GRINNNIN
    VISON ID BLURED
    STRUGGLIN TRYNA FIGURE OUT WOT 2 DO
    DUNO WHO 2 LISTEN 2
    I WANNA GET AWAY
    GET OUT OF DIS DAZE
    FEELIN LIKE IM IN MAZE
    SO MUCH IN MA HEAD
    WEIGHIN ME DOWN LIKE A DEAD WEIGHT
    EVERY1 DAT CARED 4 ME HAS GONE
    COZ OF FINGZ DAT IVE DUN
    SAT IN A POLICE CELL
    DAT WAS ST8 HELL
    LOOKIN 4 A WAY OUT
    SCREAMIN & SHOUTIN
    TAKIN A LIL PEEP THRO DA HOLE
    MAKIN SURE I AINT TOPPED MYSELF
    CAUGHT BETWEEN GOOD & BAD
    GOIN 2 CROWN COURT
    COZ I GOT CAUGHT
    WITH STOLEN GOODZ
    DATZ WOT IVE BIN TAUGHT
    IM LOOKIN AT A SENTCENCE
    I KNO I WONT SURIVIVE
    I WONT WALK OUT ALIVE
    CARRIED OUT IN A BODY BAG INSTEAD
    IM LONG OVER DUE DEAD
     
  16. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    the end

    TRIGGER




    Do I Stay Or Go On Ma Mind Each Day
    Figured Out Da Way
    I Kno I Need 2 Get It Rite
    Plan It So Im Out Of Sight
    Hidden Away So No1 Can Find Me
    Start My Drinkin
    While Im Slowly Sinkin Tablets
    Dun Dis B4 2 Get It So I Kno
    How 2 Make It Work
    Soon Pass Out & Vomit
    I Guess Ill Die Chokin On My Own Vomit An An Od
    Aint No1 Here 2 Find Me Or Save Me Now
    Im Finally Free
     
  17. ~PinkElephants~

    ~PinkElephants~ Senior member

    I think your poetry is very heart felt, more freestyle type stuff, not generally what I read but nonetheless good.

    What thesemoments said...I agree. I think your poetry would be more fitting if it was typed correctly rather than using slang for words. I don't know just my two cents :hug:
     
  18. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    Thank u 4 comments i understand now, tried 2 write it without slang,


    FEELIN LIKE A SMALL FISH IN A BIG POND
    WONDERIN HOW LONG I CAN KEEP FIGHTING
    WHEN IM SLOWLY LOSING SIGHT
    OF WHAT IS RIGHT
    HEADING 2 HELL AINT NO1 2 SAVE ME
    FINALLY MADE MY MIND UP
    SEEIN IT ALL
    FIGURED OUT I WANNA FALL
    SEE IF I FLY OR DIE
    I GUESS ITZ TIME
    DAYZ GET HARDER
    WEEKZ GETTIN LONGER
    MONTHS BRINGIN MORE PAIN
    FEELING LIKE IM STANDIN IN DA RAIN
    GETTIN WASHED AWAY
    WILL I MAKE IT 2 ANOTHA DAY
    LOSIN MY VOICE 2 SAY DA WORDS
    IM NO LONGER FEELIN FINE
    NO LONGER I WANNA LIVE
    I JUS WANNA GIVE IN
    FED UP OF DEPRESSION
    RATHER BE 6FT UNDER
    NO1 CAN HURT ME NO MORE
    IM FINALLY SEEING WHAT IS WASNT FOR
    A LIFE FULL OF PAIN AN STRIFE
    I DONT WANT IT ANYMORE
    JUS LET ME DIE CURL UP IN A BALL
    SHUT MY EYES, ITS MY TIME 2 GO
    NO LONGER FEELING PAIN
    LOOKING DOWN FROM DA SKY
     
  19. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    If I Culd Say How Im Feeling
    I Couldnt Explain It
    Feeling So Many Diffrerent Emotions
    Causin Commontion Inside My Head
    Dont Kno If Im Comin Or Goin
    Stayin Or Leaving
    No Longer Believing
    That Im Gonna Be Alright
    Cause I Kno I Not
    Im Here Jus 2 Rot
    Here 4 Other Peoples Fun
    I Neva Coulda Thought My Life Would Turn Out Like This
    Everybody Takes The Piss Out Of Me
    Theres Nothing More I Can See For Me
    Been Long Dead In My Heart
    Each Day Is Breaking Me Apart
    Just A Tiny Bit More
    Living Day 2 Day Getting Harder
    Gut Feeling Telling Me To Leave
    Not Like Anyone Will Grieve For You
    Friendz,family Long Gone
    They Dont Need A Sucidial Crimnal
    Left With Bear Mimium
    More And More Im Heading For Death
    I Know Soon I Will Breathe My Last Breath.
     
  20. Bonez

    Bonez Active Member

    new poem

    I NEED 2 SAY HOW IM FEELIN
    BUT I CANT SEEM 2 REVEAL
    IM FEELING SUICIDAL
    CUTTING EVERY NITE
    HIDING AWAY FROM THE WORLD
    IM LIVING IN MY OWN
    LIVING IN A BUBBLE
    NOTHING SEEMZ REAL
    IM JUST GOING ALONG
    FED UP OF GOING WRONG
    FED UP OF IT ALL
    FED UP OF WAITING TO FALL
    FED UP OF SLEEPLESS NITES
    THIS IS NO LONGER MY LIFE
    DEPRESSION HAS TAKEN IT OVER
    CANT SEEM 2 ASK FOR HELP
    SO USED 2 HIDING IT AWAY FROM SOCIETY
    LIVING IN ANXIETY
    IN REALITY I GUESS IM JUST SCARED :sad:
     
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