Burning

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Xistence, Feb 20, 2008.

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  1. Xistence

    Xistence Well-Known Member

    This is the first time I have ever written a poem or song or anything, so it sucks really bad. You can go ahead and tell me how much you hate it, I don't mind. I already know I suck at this kind of thing.

    Burning​


    As I walked out the door
    the thoughts were going through my head
    I couldn't stop thinking
    of all the things I should have said

    I am alone with my pain
    I have nowhere left to turn
    My release was right in front of me
    and now I watch it

    Burn

    Like everything is gasoline
    flames taking over
    There is no hope left for me
    Destroyed
    by all the pain and internal strife
    I'll watch the whole world scorch
    in the last moments of my life

    I loved you all so much
    I wish I could prove it to you
    It is too late now
    Everything is over, I am through

    I'm sorry I took up your time
    and with my fading breath
    I will tell you all goodbye
    as I turn to face my death

    Burning

    Like everything is gasoline
    flames taking over
    There is no hope left for me
    Destroyed
    by all the pain and internal strife
    I'll watch the whole world scorch
    in the last moments of my life

    Burning

    Like everything is gasoline
    flames taking over
    There is no hope left for me
    Destroyed
    by all the pain and internal strife
    I'll watch the whole world scorch
    in the last moments of my life​
     
  2. Lead Savior

    Lead Savior Well-Known Member

    No one here will ever say that your work is bad (and no one should), because it is an expression of your feeling, which cannot be "bad" or "incorrect" in any way.

    Good writing.
     
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