Call it what you want.

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Pills, Jan 6, 2006.

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  1. Pills

    Pills Well-Known Member

    I haven't been on the forum for a while. Here's something I wrote during my new interim course at college. Hope you like it.

    Snow is falling - softly, bleakly - in my hair, the white dust fleeting - slowly, meekly - doth my heart beating, blood and guts in which is pleading my lost soul of which is screaming to whom my being once had meaning - sadly, falling to a dreaming.

    Slowly, softly, bleakly, meekly.
    Life so harsh, but death so teasing.

    Live as if it all was over.
    "Hold me dear," were words I spoke her...
  2. Worthless?

    Worthless? New Member

    I like it!
  3. AlopexAngel

    AlopexAngel Chat Buddy

    Im love it but I'm not too fond yof the last two lines. The meter or flow or something is different from the rest. Please, don't take this the wrong way. I love but decided to offer a little constructive criticism.
  4. marthijn1987

    marthijn1987 Guest

    Hi pills

    I also like it! :smile:
  5. Convergence

    Convergence Guest

    Very nice, I like your choice of words.

    Also glad to see that you have had time to get on.
  6. Pills

    Pills Well-Known Member

    Thanks for all the compliments. It means a lot.
  7. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

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