I thought I'd share some of the poems I've written over the past year or so. Some I like, some I hate. Most are still drafts. I'd like some feedback? (I actually wrote this one about SF) Untitled Dearest stranger Open your eyes And remove yourself from danger You are something You are someone Yes, the world is wrong I can relate But we must be strong Before it’s too late Even when you feel You can’t hold on for long Just listen For we are the gears That put in to motion The people’s fears With just the slightest notion Oh and we will never falter We will climb high Overcome and defy The lies that rise Beneath this alter And we will stand Right here More alive than ever Yeah, things can only get better - Shatter When I look into the mirror I see one of two things The wise underachiever that I strive to be Or the body eye reside in that gives meaning to me And if I see the latter Please step back away Cuz that mirrors about to shatter Gone with all the lies it portrays - (this one is a song- i know the title is odd but it makes sense to me) Michael 12:46 “I have come as light into the world, so that everyone who believes in me will not remain in darkness” I’ve got the book of excuses The bible of lies I’ve got my tongue tied Fingers crossed Eyes closed while I cry And I, I don’t want to survive I hear the crackling in my ear The cries of the dead I hear the smacking in my ear Of betrayal, You said Let’s march together To the darkening light I can see the flames And I don’t know If it’ll be alright We’ve been through hell on earth We’re ready for hell in the dirt And yeah it sounds rather peaceful , heh The heat of the fire The coldness in our hearts The heat of our passion And the coldness of the dark They mix together Like water and oil Like gasoline and fire I’ll strike the match Heed the warnings I hope this is dire And I, I don’t want to survive I hear the crackling in my ear The cries of the dead I hear the smacking in my ear Of betrayal, You said Let’s march together To the darkening light I can see the flames And I don’t know If it’ll be alright LET’S MARCH TOGETHER TOWARD THE BLINDING LIGHT OUR PIECE OF HEAVEN IN THE SOFT SOUND SUMMER NIGHT LET’S MARCH TOGETHER TOWARD THE NOTHING BLACK OUR PIECE OF HELL THESE SHIT CARDS WE WERE DEALT NOW TELL ME WHAT WILL SET YOU FREE NOW TELL ME WHAT will set me free - I Feel Human The pins and needles burn My skin pierced Sliced into pieces When you look at me What do you see I feel human My white shirt stains red Clear tears taste sweet And all the things I said At this moment, I regret I feel human With arms stretched out Trembling fingers bring comfort Now come forth, hold my head up for me Too hard to bare, too hard to be And tomorrowʼs another day So blast a sad tune Or do whatever you need to do Because weʼre just human - That's about all that's remotely ready to share. I've never shared these with anyone ever before--thoughts?