Collection of Poems

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by mlxjaded, Aug 14, 2011.

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  1. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    I thought I'd share some of the poems I've written over the past year or so. Some I like, some I hate. Most are still drafts. I'd like some feedback?

    (I actually wrote this one about SF)

    Untitled

    Dearest stranger
    Open your eyes
    And remove yourself from danger
    You are something
    You are someone
    Yes, the world is wrong
    I can relate
    But we must be strong
    Before it’s too late
    Even when you feel
    You can’t hold on for long
    Just listen
    For we are the gears
    That put in to motion
    The people’s fears
    With just the slightest notion
    Oh and we will never falter
    We will climb high
    Overcome and defy
    The lies that rise
    Beneath this alter
    And we will stand
    Right here
    More alive than ever

    Yeah, things can only get better

    -
    Shatter

    When I look into the mirror
    I see one of two things
    The wise underachiever that I strive to be
    Or the body eye reside in that gives meaning to me
    And if I see the latter
    Please step back away
    Cuz that mirrors about to shatter
    Gone with all the lies it portrays

    -

    (this one is a song- i know the title is odd but it makes sense to me)

    Michael 12:46


    “I have come as light into the world, so that everyone who believes in me will not remain in darkness”

    I’ve got the book of excuses
    The bible of lies
    I’ve got my tongue tied
    Fingers crossed
    Eyes closed while I cry

    And I,
    I don’t want to survive
    I hear the crackling in my ear
    The cries of the dead
    I hear the smacking in my ear
    Of betrayal, You said
    Let’s march together
    To the darkening light
    I can see the flames
    And I don’t know
    If it’ll be alright

    We’ve been through hell on earth
    We’re ready for hell in the dirt
    And yeah it sounds rather peaceful , heh
    The heat of the fire
    The coldness in our hearts
    The heat of our passion
    And the coldness of the dark
    They mix together
    Like water and oil
    Like gasoline and fire
    I’ll strike the match
    Heed the warnings
    I hope this is dire

    And I,
    I don’t want to survive
    I hear the crackling in my ear
    The cries of the dead
    I hear the smacking in my ear
    Of betrayal, You said
    Let’s march together
    To the darkening light
    I can see the flames
    And I don’t know If it’ll be alright

    LET’S MARCH TOGETHER
    TOWARD THE BLINDING LIGHT
    OUR PIECE OF HEAVEN
    IN THE SOFT SOUND SUMMER NIGHT
    LET’S MARCH TOGETHER
    TOWARD THE NOTHING BLACK
    OUR PIECE OF HELL
    THESE SHIT CARDS WE WERE DEALT
    NOW TELL ME WHAT
    WILL SET YOU FREE
    NOW TELL ME WHAT

    will set me free

    -

    I Feel Human

    The pins and needles burn
    My skin pierced
    Sliced into pieces
    When you look at me
    What do you see
    I feel human

    My white shirt stains red
    Clear tears taste sweet
    And all the things I said
    At this moment, I regret
    I feel human

    With arms stretched out
    Trembling fingers bring comfort
    Now come forth, hold my head up for me
    Too hard to bare, too hard to be
    And tomorrowʼs another day
    So blast a sad tune
    Or do whatever you need to do

    Because weʼre just human

    -

    That's about all that's remotely ready to share.
    I've never shared these with anyone ever before--thoughts?
     
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    i think your poems are wonderful hun your song very well written i would love to
    read more of them You express your emotions so well with words h ugs
     
  3. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    You have to say that cuz you're a mod ;)
     
  4. IV2010

    IV2010 Well-Known Member

    I'm not a mod and I like them too! :)
     
  5. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    No hun i do not have to say that because i am a mod not at all I say it because it is true. I like your poetry and your song very much :hugtackles:
     
  6. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    Here's another song/poem type thing. Feedback?

    After

    Now you care
    When I’m on my way out
    Now you’d like to share
    How you’ve relieved all of your doubts about me
    But I’m not staying
    No, I hope you know how to live on your own

    I’m not waiting (not waiting)
    Don’t want you to tell me
    After the matter (what’s the matter?)
    Keep your facts to yourself now baby
    I’m gone already (are you ready?)
    To find out what it’s like to be all alone
    I'm gone already (are you ready?)
    To handle all of this on your own

    I'm gone already

    Gone, with all that’s mine intact
    I’m missing nothing
    But now are you missing me for once?
     
  7. Speedy

    Speedy Staff Alumni

    I don't know you, so I'm not sure what happened in your relationship.. Your writing is clear and easy to process. Also, I am not saying this just because I'm a mod ;) (I'm a chat monitor - I don't moderate the forums) :hug:

    Take care, and keep writing! :)

    Mr. A
     
  8. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    ^ Thank you! I normally just write whatever's on my mind so I don't usually go through it and try to cover it up with metaphors and such. I prefer it this way but that's just my preference. I'm glad you like them :)
     
  9. Aquarius123

    Aquarius123 Well-Known Member

    I am not a mod either and I do like the way you express your feelings through your poetry.

    With love - Aquarius

    :hug:​
     
  10. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    Guide Me Home


    In the dark
    I love my life
    So I close my eyes
    So I can hide
    Because in the light
    I regain sight
    I see my flaws
    And I can't hide
    So come now dark
    Stop and cover me
    Show me how to act
    Show me how to be
    Help me shadow doubt
    So I can turn away
    Help me change my life
    Help me change my ways

    And in the night
    I toss and turn
    Till I find the light
    That helps guide me
    Out of harms hard way
    That helps me see the day
    And guides me home
    So I can face the end
    Just help me change my life
    Help me change my ways
     
  11. Speedy

    Speedy Staff Alumni

    That's beautiful. I can tell it holds a lot of meaning to you. :hug: Thanks so much for sharing! :)
     
  12. Aquarius123

    Aquarius123 Well-Known Member

    I Asked The Universal Christ

    I Asked The Universal Christ
    The wise one in you and me, the Christ Spirit,
    In whom we are all one, for a long time
    Spoke to our world and taught us
    Through the legend of the Master Jesus.
    S/He is now ready to communicate with each one of us direct.

    This is how it came about that one fine day I was praying:
    ‘You, who are the wise Father/Mother of all,
    Can you relieve me of my bad habits?’
    To my astonishment the living God inside me,
    The small still voice of my conscience,
    The Christ Spirit replied: ‘My beloved child.
    It’s not for me to take them from you,
    You alone can work on changing your character traces,
    So that you may grow into someone you really would like to be.
    The same as I cannot change you,
    You cannot change others, only yourself.’

    From ‘The Universal Christ Now Speaks To Us And Our World’

    With love and light,
    Aquarius​
     
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