Cut Up and Discarded + No Answer

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  1. CCK

    CCK Well-Known Member

    I was in chat and mentioned that I write poems to help myself cope. It was suggested that I post some on the forums. These are the two poems I've actually finished and, well, welcome to an abstract window into my messed up mind.

    Cut Up and Discarded by CCK
    This one is very autobiographical and straightforward. It was surprisingly
    easy to write, requiring no hard thought. Probably because it is so rooted in twisted emotions.

    Victim of my own desire
    Head confused, heart on fire
    Slowly all my passions wane
    Overridden by the brain.

    No more effort left to give;
    Losing all my will to live
    Can't escape what's in my head
    Feels like I've been left for dead

    Never felt so damn alone.
    No place where I feel at home
    Thus I turn another page;
    Turning sadness into rage.

    No Answer (Revised) by CCK
    This is not the original version I wrote, I reworked it to make it flow better so
    it's more "polished" and slightly less emotionally rough. It sounds best when read
    relatively quickly because of it's 6-5-6-5 structure and alternating rhyme scheme.

    It gets hard to keep sane
    When you're so depraved
    That all hope starts to wane
    That you can be saved

    My search for the answer's
    Like searching for air,
    I can't fucking see it
    It should be right there.

    The end is a blessing
    It's not such a curse;
    Why should I keep going
    When life's even worse?

    I don't understand why
    Self-harm's frowned upon
    Please just leave me to die;
    I'm already gone.
  2. Tears_of_blood

    Tears_of_blood Well-Known Member

    Wow your poems are beautifully written and so insightful you truly helped me to understand your feelings :hugtackles:
  3. CCK

    CCK Well-Known Member

    That's a very encouraging comment and I'm really glad to hear it.
  4. canis-lupis

    canis-lupis Well-Known Member

    cant really say more than that . keep posting
  5. CCK

    CCK Well-Known Member

    When the inspiration strikes I write. I'll post if I get anything good.
  6. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Beautiful :arms: Thanks for sharing :)
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