Dark Saint

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Alais, Mar 1, 2009.

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  1. Alais

    Alais Well-Known Member

    Sometimes my poetry is with me, and sometimes it departs me. I've posted two here this morning.

    Alais


    Dark Saint

    Keep me in your thoughts tonight;
    I stare up into the face of the dark saint.
    The message that he whispers me
    Makes mind and heart to faint.

    Turning quick upon my heel
    I flee as one pursued.
    I leave behind his warnings
    And seek my solitude.

    Soft, warm darkness
    And the muting of the earth
    Could provide no better silence
    For this writer’s berth.

    Stopping short I see ahead;
    The dark saint waits there for me.
    Some dire message to pass on,
    Some prophetic vision I must see.

    Away from me saint,
    With your shadowed countenance.
    I know what I do;
    Leave me alone for just once.

    If a saint you be
    Then let’s try something fresh;
    And assist as I go
    The way of all flesh.

    Get thee behind me dark saint.
     
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Me likes it.

    Nice use of good vs evil, life vs death. Clever to join opposites/opposing ideas, e.g., "dark" with "saint". The last line...I was nodding in appreciation!
     
  3. aki

    aki Well-Known Member

    that's really great- lot's of atmosphere, tension. well done.
     
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