Dejected Heart

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Forsaken Heretic, Mar 20, 2008.

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  1. Forsaken Heretic

    Forsaken Heretic Well-Known Member

    I was actually trying to write a song when I came up with this little bit. I don't think it's long enough to be an actual poem, but I just like the emotion it communicated. The song wasn't meant to be a sad one, but some how this just came out. Hope you guys like it.


    Dejected Heart

    Take away this hurt
    Take away this pain.
    A heart in solitude
    A heart that lives in shame.
    Save me from myself,
    Free me from this cage.
    I can't do it on my own
    Please save me from this rage.
     
  2. Surviving

    Surviving Well-Known Member

    Does a poem really have a set length?

    At any rate I like it, I hope you post more...

    U r right - good, strong emotion it in.
     
  3. Wormling

    Wormling Well-Known Member

    I like it. It's short, to the point, powerful, and flows well.
     
  4. Forsaken Heretic

    Forsaken Heretic Well-Known Member

    Thank you both, I appreciate it. I'm really glad you like it, I enjoy writing.
     
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