Depression, who is this?

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by mortdesinos, Sep 20, 2011.

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  1. mortdesinos

    mortdesinos Well-Known Member

    What is this benevolent monster clawing at me?

    Benevolent, yet monstrous? I can’t be bothered,
    to question your judgment, your grammar, your substance

    Tame and terse, not cheery, nor crisp,
    you sway like a tree and blow with the mist
    Your aura, sprawled in public, rests outside o’ thee,
    Stepped on is the beauty that once set you free

    Up, and away! Who betrothed sickness on me?

    The monster who eats it. Ah hee hee, You, see!
    Sickness, it goes on, living inside of you,
    It’s Sickness you’ve married, and whom your kids shall be too

    Shall be? And what now, it’s crawling into my soul

    Your soul’s nearly dead. When warmth comes, let it melt
    It’ll burst from the flesh, burning auras and regrets
    And then as you wake, skid and shake you’ll hear moans,
    It won’t be but sprung coils, and bedding and foam

    But wait, with Sickness or anyone else, there’s no marriage!
    And why, while at home, shall my brain be disparaged?
    What’ll come of my spirit, my soul and its brain,
    And oh, my creaking bed, and all of this pain?

    Yes, you are, yes you will,
    Don’t whine, you’re a menace, you’re naïve and senseless,
    so that does it, that ends it, May death do our sentence

    Neither one is dying

    Exactly, stop crying!
     
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  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Loved reading your poem hun so creative your words such an image they bring to my mind hugs to you
     
  3. mortdesinos

    mortdesinos Well-Known Member

    Thank you. You are so kind. Thanks for your support over the last two years. By the way, each time there is a break in a stanza it means the speaker is changing. It's a back and forth conversation between two entities. I realized this might not have been so clear.
     
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  4. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    when i first read it i was seeing it was two people talking entitites yes i see that now I like your ending neither one is dying exactly stop crying i talk to me sometimes like that too hun just inner dialogues hugs:hugtackles:
     
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