Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by BrokenPieces, Dec 4, 2006.

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  1. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    *Well, here is the background info on this poem. I got upset at the man, and i dont know how to tell him how i feel, by coming out and saying it... my feelings are better left for paper... so enjoy, and PLEASE COMMENT!!!!*

    Cant you see I am trying
    Trying to make this work
    But it seems everytime
    I get tossed out into the cold.

    I really like you
    And i am at a loss
    For what is to come next
    Keep trying for the same result.

    Your pushing me away
    And i end up feeling bad
    Because i dont know
    If its me you are pushing away.

    If only i can make you see
    That i dont want to hurt you
    I just want to be with you
    I wish you would see what its doing.

    Your hiding from me in more ways than one
    I cant say that i havent hidden from you too
    But i have, and came clean to you
    I wish you would open up and tell me why.

    There is so much we are missing out on
    I want to see it all, experience it all
    But only with you, there is no other,
    No one but you, to put that smile on my lips.

    Once again, i am fighting to find you
    Feeling like there is no hope
    But i still move on in search
    Of something that doesnt seem to be here.

    You just dont seem to care
    What happens with this
    Are you even aware I am here
    Are you even aware of me?

    What more is there left for me
    What more is there left for you, for us
    What more can i do to make you see
    That i want to be with you.

    I want to be with you, that it hurts
    But you still dont see
    What more there can be
    What more in this life.

    What more do you want me to do, to say?
    What more do you want really,
    Do you even want this?
    Or is this a waste of time?
    You tell me.
  2. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I like it!!:smile: Keep sharing with us, please!:smile:

  3. Flatliner

    Flatliner Guest

    You really get your emotions out. It's good.
  4. Oh My...Ain't timing everything - when BOTH are ready to open up. You sure expressed the dilemma well :sad:

  5. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    Thanks, I guess you can say that this is my only form, of telling people how i really feel most of the time...

    Well, if only timin was great really, i still cant tell him what i am upset about... for some reason, it just disapears everytime he kisses... i wish i would just tell him what is that i am upset about, and work on it...

    Thanks hun!!! there are more coming...

    And thanks for the comments... means alot to me..
  6. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    no more replies please to this poem...

    i am having it locked...

    too much emotion behind it...

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