Did this for my boyfriend, comments are appreciated. x

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Sycotic_Sarah, Aug 4, 2007.

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  1. You say you love me,
    but my thoughts think different,
    you say you'll never leave,
    but all the others went.

    You say you care for me,
    want to cuddle me,
    hold me in your arms,
    kiss me,
    I see these as lies,
    I'm sorry,
    but I don't believe you,
    everyone else said that too,
    where are they now?
    You'll join the que,
    the que that left.

    I love you more than words can express,
    pretty impossible huh?
    Not at all.
    I love you with all my heart, soul, every fibre of my being,
    I'm just scared of you, scared you'll be leaving,
    leaving sometime soon.
    I want to trust you,
    to open up to you,
    to let you in,
    to not let the thoughts win,
    the thoughts who tell me,
    who think you're lying,
    deep down, like you said,
    my heart believes you,
    it's true,
    but I'm so scared,
    so very scared you'll leave.

    I don't want you to leave,
    I love you,
    more than anything,
    words can't describe my feelings,
    too powerful to be spoken of,
    too strong to describe,
    I love you though,
    please don't leave me,
    I love you,
    please don't abandon,
    I love you,
    I just hope I'm not in for more pain,
    more suffering,
    please don't vanish,
    please stay,
    I love you,
    I want to be with you,

    I hope that,
    oneday we will finally be together,
    face to face, heart to heart,
    and I'll finally be able to look you in your beautiful eyes,
    and whisper in your ear,
    'I love you',
    and I'll put my arms around you,
    hold you close,
    stay up all night,
    just looking in each others eyes,
    holding each other,
  2. Isa

    Isa Well-Known Member

    I write a lot of poetry.

    I express how I feel this way. I vent this way. I even run my own poetry forum.

    Last night my boyfriend told me he was upset by a poem i wrote about how my depression forces a barrier between us.

    Only say what you want someone to remember forever
  3. Not sure if he's read it yet, but I told him about it.

    He hasn't replied to my IM yet.

    Maybe... was a bad idea...


  4. Isa

    Isa Well-Known Member

    just explain yourself properly

    with poems like this you cant really let them interpret themselves as everyones insecure really and they will probaly assume the worst

    as long as they understand its about your thoughts & worries and you love them and its not them

    itll be ok
  5. he said it was beautiful and made him cry.
  6. Blackness

    Blackness Guest

    That is really good, like what I think.
  7. No one should be expected or relied upon for one own's entire happiness. The responsibility is WAY too large and unfair...

  8. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    Wow, i'm not sure what to say, Sarah. Thank you for sharing it with us though. :smile: :hug:
  9. I don't rely upon him for that...

    Thanks Blackness.

    :) Thanks Caz. :hug:
  10. amroth

    amroth Active Member

    I love this poem, it is as honest as a poem can get. It shows your deep love for your very, very lucky boyfriend. And I know he felt this in his heart. This poem hits very close to home; If it is O.K. if I ask, is this relationship long distance? If so, with your love it will work and it will blossom beautifully beyond your imagination. Never let go. =)
  11. Yes, it is long distance. He's coming at Chrismtas to visit me for the first time. I'm so excited. :D I can't wait. I love him very much, and it seems impossible because we have known each other for such short time...

    Thanks Amroth. x
  12. smackh2o

    smackh2o SF Supporter

    I envy you. I wish I could meet my love at Christmas. Maybe I could, I don't know :S

    I hope everything goes swell for you. I loved that poem.
  13. You could if you put your mind to it. :tongue:


    Thanks h2o.
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