Do you even?

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by LeaveMeAlone, Nov 18, 2006.

Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.
  1. LeaveMeAlone

    LeaveMeAlone Well-Known Member

    Do you even know I'm here?
    can you see me when you hurry by?
    I stand and watch, in your world
    an observer

    Your hurry to shop, to eat, to drink
    to work, to play, to live, to die

    There is a world around you
    you don't even notice
    time is relative
    only from 9 till 5

    You see so much yet feel so little
    bombs go off and thousands die
    look at those new shoes
    I must buy

    Not long ago you stopped for a minute
    you thought of a time decades gone by
    how much is relevant, any? None?
    How about that minute, that second, that pause
    The whole world changed, for the better, for worse?

    The winds shifted, the sun became rain
    A thousand pulses went off in your brain
    Who's grandfather is that, in that Hearse?
    The girl just born, a sister of yours?

    What does it matter, is it relevant to me?
    I need a fibre optic Christmas Tree

    My fingers touch your world for a second
    they wither and age, the feeling electric
    You pass through me, our souls collide
    I feel you for a second, there are thoughts inside

    But you cannot hear them, in your busy world
    they are buried, trapped, deep in your soul
    Step out with me, for a minute and soar
    watch as their lives, become a distant roar

    You're free to feel now, to express, to create
    hear your own mind, contemplate
    you're existence is a canvas, here go paint
    make of it what you will
    in this limitless state.

    But as soon as you start, you begin to awake
    you have to hurry, your going to be late
    reports to file, papers to collate
    a train to catch to Harrogate
    You could stay here forever
    the solution is easy

    But I'm not ready to leave, I hear you cry

    No, it seems, neither am I.​



    By LeaveMeAlone, aka Matt.​
     
  2. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Oohh, I like this one very much.:smile: YOu express your feelings very well. Thank you for sharing with us.:smile:

    least
     
  3. That was truly awesome. I'm speechless. (is that ok?) All about so many distractions in this life - stuff that doesn't matter - I'm SO there but makes me feel alone. Thank you for making me feel less so. Those are beautiful and rare words...

    FAL1
     
    Last edited: Nov 18, 2006
  4. LeaveMeAlone

    LeaveMeAlone Well-Known Member

    Yeah what's weird about this is I started writing with only a couple of lines in my head, and just kinda let it flow but I did have somewhat of an idea about how I wanted it to feel like I had a message to convey but wasn't sure yet, but it kinda transformed mid poem, I started out tryiing to describe this cold and lonely place that I felt trapped in and by the end was revelling in it, describing the "other world" as being cold and emotionless.

    I suppose maybe it had something do with the fact that I took my anti depressent just before I started to write, so maybe it was kicking in at that point ;) i dunno.
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    I like it :D
     
Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.