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Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Sycotic_Sarah, May 9, 2007.

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  1. Tears rolling down my cheeks,
    burning the skin,
    I sit in my room and think,
    thinking if I'll ever win.

    I shout and scream,
    I curse and cry,
    but in the end,
    I know I will die.

    Shivering cold,
    goosebumps appear,
    I sense it,
    the end is near.

    Staring into thin space,
    atmosphere around me shakes,
    it blurs,
    I fall asleep,
    never to wake.

    Shaking,
    freezing,
    dying,
    leaving...
     
  2. ~Nobody~

    ~Nobody~ Well-Known Member

    Sarah.... :hug:

    I hope it helped a bit to write that down. You worded it beautifully. x
     
  3. kindtosnails

    kindtosnails Staff Alumni

    i like it. Rhyme is so hard to get right (for me anyway :rolleyes: ). You did an excellent job. So sorry for the way that you feel, though. :hug:
     
  4. jcat

    jcat Staff Alumni

    i like your poem s.s. i'm posting some of my grandmothers. maybe you'll get something out of. that goes for everyone.
     
    Last edited by a moderator: May 13, 2007
  5. leptoon

    leptoon Well-Known Member

    Do you mind if I use this poem as the lyrics to a song I am working on?
     
  6. leptoon

    leptoon Well-Known Member

    Kkers.

    Here it is

    http://www.supload.com/listen?s=ShLjVETy6UB

    Lyrics:
    Tears rolling down my cheek
    burning the skin
    burning the skin

    i sit in my room and think
    thinking if I'll ever win

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake

    Shivering cold
    goosebumps appear
    I sense it
    the end is near

    I shout and scream and cry
    but in the end
    I know I'll die

    Staring into space
    atmosphere around me shakes
    it blurs

    Staring into space
    atmosphere around me shakes
    it blurs

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake

    Staring into space
    atmosphere around me shakes
    it blurs

    Staring into space
    atmosphere around me shakes
    it blurs

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    never to wake

    shaking
    freezing
    dying
    leaving

    never to wake
    END


    Tell me if you like it... I butchered you're poem a bit, lol.
     
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  7. ~Nobody~

    ~Nobody~ Well-Known Member

    :eek:hmy: Wow :blink:.

    You guys should actually collaborate!

    :arms:

    :thumbup:
     
  8. that's awesome, honest.

    :p butchered.
     
  9. leptoon

    leptoon Well-Known Member

    Thats a good idea...

    Sarah, sense you're under moderation, heres me AIM. If you want to help me out with lyrics, I'm sure we would be great together.

    AIM: leptooners
     
  10. Okay, thankyou, I'll add you next time I go on. :)
     
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