Eight Fifty Three (*trig/suiref*)

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  1. ginock

    ginock Member

    I wanted to post one of my poems on the site to get peoples oppinions upon it, its from my site in my sig if you want to look at any others, hope you like them.

    Eight Fifty Three

    He stands on the edge of cliff
    no-one around to call
    he stares into the impending
    no-one to break his fall

    He didn't feel he was worth it
    he didn't think anyone cared
    the irony is he never asked
    all he did was stare

    Life went past in blur
    it never seemed to slow
    but now its fast, he looks to the past
    and see's why he is low

    He didn't feel he was worth it
    he didn't think anyone cared
    the irony is he never asked
    all he did was stare

    It started on his 18th birthday
    he woke up in a sweat
    he didn't know what happened
    but he knew it wasn't right

    He didn't feel he was worth it
    he didn't think anyone cared
    the irony is he never asked
    all he did was stare

    He always felt suicidle
    it was something he saw as the norm
    like an everyday occourance
    didn't it happen to everyone?

    He didn't feel he was worth it
    he didn't think anyone cared
    the irony is he never asked
    all he did was stare

    Finally he steps off
    it falls and breaks his neck
    he falles into the sea
    a lifeboat goes past, he is taken away
    prounounced dead at eight fifty three.
     
  2. Abacus21

    Abacus21 Staff Alumni

    Bloody hell mate.....powerful......

    Its great ! :)

    Joe
     
  3. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Awesome poem :D
     
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