errr... cant think of a title...

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  1. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    well... cant think of a title... and definitely NOT my best, but felt like posting...


    you say that you love me
    but you're never there
    you say you love me
    but i know you dont care
    you say you care for me
    when i know that you dont
    you say that you love us
    but you dont really mean it

    i know you are lying
    when you say that you didnt
    i know you are lying
    when you say that you couldnt
    you know that i know
    so why dont you tell her?
    you know that i know
    so tell her now,
    or tell her never

    trust is gained
    trust is broken
    trust is lost
    when you're not open
    trust is lost
    quicker than its gained
    our trust has died
    it makes me pained

    i can forgive
    cant ever forget
    i dont see
    how you've no regret
    no remorse
    for what you've done
    no conscience
    no soul
    just a cold black heart
    to replace what you had
    the old you is gone
    its just a remnant now
    a shadow thats gone
     
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  2. Darkness N Light

    Darkness N Light Staff Alumni

    TDM,
    Hey sweetie I love your poem. It is very nicely put. I do not think even I could have came up with something that was so nicely said but yet very powerful. I am so glad that you posted it. If it is not one of your best I would love to see one of your best. Thanks for sharing it with us. Keep up the good work. Take care and I love you. :hug: :cheekkiss :hug: :cheekkiss :hug: :cheekkiss :hug: :cheekkiss


    With Love,
    Crystal :hug: :cheekkiss
     
  3. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    That's a great poem I hear ya. I really get it and it's wonderful. Maybe you could call it "Gone' or "Broken". dunno... it's good though. :hug:
     
  4. Mem

    Mem Guest

    Nice work, you have real style, keep them coming. :smile:
     
  5. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    wow...

    such emotion in it...

    your great... so many more poems to go lol
     
  6. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    sad poem :sad:

    I like it..thanks for posting hun xxx
     
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