Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Butterfly, Mar 18, 2011.

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  1. Butterfly

    Butterfly Resident SF Sims Enthusiast Staff Alumni SF Author SF Supporter

    I wrote this nearly two years ago of being with my fiance :D

    Heart so cold, dead as the night
    Your burning soul set me alight
    So much pain, hurt and despair
    You caressed my hand and stroked my hair
    Reassuring me it'd all be fine
    My soul within began to shine
    Returning the favour, i'd help you out
    Hours of fun and clowning about
    When I had news I'd tell you first
    Unsuspecting that my bubble would burst
    Plagued with torrid lies and deception
    My heart shattered, I felt your rejection
    Months went by, we grew apart
    Friends no more, it broke my heart
    The perfect tale of a bitter end
    Tarnished hearts took time to mend
    Until one day I received a text
    Pondering what would happen next
    We agreed, we were mistaken
    No more tears, no longer forsaken
    Friends again, at long last
    And then it all, happened so fast
    One minute a friend, the next your girl
    Your sparkling diamond, your precious pearl
    Hand in hand, on we walked
    With pride, no shame though people talked
    For I was happy I had you
    One month soon turned into two
    Shortened days, a long cold night
    Warm in your arms, it felt so right
    Your lips so soft, a gentle kiss
    We made love, eternal bliss
    Although the distance, our love is real
    That no one else could make me feel
    Sometimes it's hard, we make it through
    The depth in your eyes, tell me it's true
    My only one, you deserve the best
    Until you have it I will not rest
    So lucky and priviledged, I have you
    The four magic words, I love you too
    I pray to thee, don't let me go
    Being alone, I won't have it so
    Life without you, is not worth living
    I'd go off the rails, I'd end up sinning
    Looking ahead to the years to come
    Hoping one day, I'll bear your son
    I know I'm young, but not naive
    My one true love, I believe
    Fifteen months on, everything's fine
    Still in a daze that you are mine.
  2. Julia-C

    Julia-C Well-Known Member

    First off, I am jealous. Your in love and I'm not. :hugtackles:

    A lot of serious writers of poetry frown on rhyming. Personally, I love rhyming. I think often the rhyming helps to create a rhythm to the read. I love poems of this nature as they seem to come off as honest and sincere in terms of the writer's emotions. This poem don just that. Thank you for sharing. :wink:
  3. Butterfly

    Butterfly Resident SF Sims Enthusiast Staff Alumni SF Author SF Supporter

    Thank you for your kind words Julia. I wrote this nearly two years ago, just before a significant event happened in my life. I just stumbled across it on my laptop. I'd been having a crappy day and reading it cheered me up so I thought I'd share.

    I love rhyming poems, especially emotive rhyming poems! You can feel the writers emotions, especially when the pace picks up!
  4. justMe7

    justMe7 Well-Known Member

    wow...he's a lucky guy :) Beautiful poem
  5. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    its amazing. :) and i llove rhyming poems too! i like free verse but theres this knack in making the words fit and getting thr rhythm right, that elusive bit is half the fun. :lol!:
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