Fall

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  1. Sabriel

    Sabriel Active Member

    Fall.
    Falling through the sky to land
    On a platter of shattered glass.
    Find the stars above and reach-
    Reach higher and higher.
    Jump.
    Watch the soles of your feet!
    Watch them break and bleed.
    Tilt a little and the world reorients
    Right side up.
    And back.
    Cover up the black clouds with
    Glue and glitter.
    Hide in the shadows of your past.
    Keep your head down and walk quickly.
    Don't worry, you're invisible.
    No one sees you.
    They'll walk right through you.
    Look for the planets
    Down in the light
    From above the rainbows.
    Sing and dance in circles
    Within the whirling vortex of time.
    Silence the clocks!
    Forget everything but the
    Here and now.
    It never ends but exists only
    In your thoughts.
    Catch the drops falling from
    Your cuts like a leaky faucet.
    Flush them down the drain.
    Mix them with the sand and
    Form your own personal oasis.
    Don't forget the palms trees.
    They might stare at you but
    Swear you're not insane.
    Are you reading the road signs?
    Where are you going?
    Don't you know mirages shimmer
    Like constellations glowing.
    Memorize your letter in the dark
    Where they won't hear you.
    Fight the demons howling in your mind.
    Nothing's really the way
    It seems at the time.
    Forgive.

    Just me... I know it's not good but oh well. The punctuation and line breaks are on purpose, though...
     
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  2. gentlelady

    gentlelady Staff Alumni

    I like it Sabriel. It is a wonderful writing. :hug:
     
  3. I love it Sabriel. It's full of strength and doubt, pain and reckoning, hope and despair, realization as the work of the trial - it's very powerful. Don't underestimate yourself...!

    "Fight the demons howling in your mind.
    Nothing's really the way
    It seems at the time."
    (*sigh* If only I could remember that)


    FAL1
     
    Last edited: Dec 3, 2006
  4. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    What? Are you kidding me? You "know it's not good"?

    It's very good. It is light-hearted, but honest. Gentle, but realistic. Simplex, but complicated.

    Brilliant!

    I especially love these lines--


    "Silence the clocks!
    Forget everything but the
    Here and now.
    It never ends but exists only
    In your thoughts.
    Catch the drops falling from
    Your cuts like a leaky faucet.
    Flush them down the drain.
    Mix them with the sand and
    Form your own personal oasis.
    Don't forget the palms trees.
    They might stare at you but
    Swear you're not insane."
     
  5. Sabriel

    Sabriel Active Member

    Thanks, everyone... :shy: :hug:
     
  6. kindtosnails

    kindtosnails Staff Alumni

    :eek:hmy: Love it, Sabriel. Amazing, fantastic, awesome...those adjectives don't really do it justice.

    Thanks for sharing :)
     
  7. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    it started of with a great beginning... i loved the ending... because it was simple with the forgive...

    it was a great poem...

    Love BP
     
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