Fatal Goodbye (one of my best)

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  1. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    Look into this heart of mine,
    Let me rest on the dividing line,
    Between insanity and all that is sane,
    The lonely days and the ones that cause pain.

    Reassure me that life is right,
    Make sure that i keep fighting this fight
    that tears me into minescule pieces
    ripped into shreads, right at the creases.

    Remind me to laugh, remind me to cry
    Save me from this fatal goodbye,
    That i keep wishing was here,
    now that i not longer live in fear.
  2. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    :hug: powerful and deep...
  3. Sadeyes

    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

    This poem would be wonderful lyrics to a song...wish I could put it to music, but my skills need much practice now...thanks for sharing, but plez keep in mind, when you are talking to someone who is better at composing, that this would make a wonderful song...big hugs
  4. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    One of your best so far:smile: ... and all your works keep getting better...:smile: though I wish you peace within yourself and some inner trust and comfort!!:smile:

    love and hugs,

  5. gentlelady

    gentlelady Staff Alumni

    Sadeyes is right Fear. This would make a wonderful song. Would you mind if I gave it a go? I have a few songs without words right now. There is one I think it may fit into with a few adjustments. Well, maybe I should leave it to someone else. The poem is beautiful hun. Keep writing. You keep improving all the time. :hug:
  6. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    :biggrin: thanks,
    and sure GL, you can give it a go if you'd like :)
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