Fields of Straw

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by empty101, Apr 12, 2010.

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  1. empty101

    empty101 Well-Known Member

    I cut out the first 4 lines... I think it's better without them.


    the scarecrow owns the air around
    with eyes of liquid gray
    a sickle may cut into the future
    past these fields of straw

    yet no matter the time or place
    those eyes of liquid gray
    under the cold dark purple sky
    with our metal hands around us

    none who walk over these fields of straw
    shall leave the same from which they came
    as we walk the air we absorb
    blows a cold breeze into our souls

    but no one must stay in this dry field
    from it we shall never look back
    and in front of us lays a land
    we will build as we choose
     
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    very thought prevoking i like it good write
     
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