first poem written in years (might trigger)

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  1. morning rush

    morning rush Well-Known Member

    wow, after years of not writing poetry, I finally wrote one. Pretty cool, hope you like it!

    [FONT=&quot] [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]I prickle my fingers on your beauty.[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]The price I have to pay for choosing you.[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]I’m bleeding profusely, [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]As I wrapped my arms around you.[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot] [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]How can something so pretty,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Turn out to be so lethal?[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Your love is deadly [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Shards of metals.[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot] [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]All the love I have pours out,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]But I am not letting go.[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]For when all that I am is out,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]You will shine and glow.[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot] [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Your roots grow within me,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Invading my body and soul,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Filling what is empty,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]And making me whole.[/FONT]
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I am glad you are writing again hun it helps so much to be able to see what emotions you are feeling
    Your poem says so much hun I do hope that you learn to take care of YOU hun and not let the one that is poisonous take over ok You take care of YOU
  3. Much afraid

    Much afraid Well-Known Member

    I think it's beautiful (last stanza / well whole piece is) bittersweet imho. ♥
  4. elevatorpass

    elevatorpass Active Member

    Your roots grow within me .. fab

    this is wonderful.. apt and emotive..

  5. soulreaper

    soulreaper Well-Known Member

    toxic but none the less as dark and lovely as metal shards, in thy body.
  6. svm299

    svm299 Member

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