Forgiven (song)

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Tnecniv, Jul 27, 2008.

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  1. Tnecniv

    Tnecniv Well-Known Member

    Hi, I wrote this song just now... but then it just popped up into my mind that it are not really like the lyrics to a song, so I desided to put it here to see what you think :biggrin: I did really like it as a poem but I dont really think it will do as a song, but.... I let you deside that :laugh: so here comes "Forgiven"

    FORGIVEN

    broken body,
    shatterd soul,
    hindrance to your highest goal.

    you break down,
    on your knees
    your future is gone,
    you cry in fear.

    you try so hard,
    you try to live,
    you feel the pain of every sin.
    not your fault, not your choise,
    but you don't want to be forgiven

    your bodys numb,
    your sweat is cold,
    you do not see whats done is done.

    solo:
    bridge:

    you try so hard,
    you try to live,
    you feel the pain of every sin.
    not your fault, not your choise,
    but you don't want to be forgiven

    your bodys numb,
    your sweat is cold,
    you do not see whats done is done.


    you try so hard,
    you try to live,
    you feel the pain of every sin.
    not your fault, not your choise,
    but you don't want to be forgiven

    solo:



    Vincent

    PS. I wrote this in 10 minutes :laugh: :tongue:
     
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  2. Tnecniv

    Tnecniv Well-Known Member

    wow :dry: no replies :dry:
     
  3. Shauna Lea

    Shauna Lea Staff Alumni

    I write music too - I really like your song! You should record it and post it :smile:
     
  4. Tnecniv

    Tnecniv Well-Known Member

    I will :biggrin: but it might take some time, I have to finde the melody on the guitar, but the melody on this song is abit hard to find out how I should play it on guitar :dry: chose a bit har vocal you see :tongue: but I'd figure it out in time :biggrin:
     
  5. ~PinkElephants~

    ~PinkElephants~ Senior member

    This is really cool! I dig it!
     
  6. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    awesome song!! I really liked it:biggrin:
     
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