Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by The_Discarded, Jun 22, 2008.

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  1. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    I unnerved the air with my stare
    and a bitter ball of cold appeared.
    A toxic drink launched toxic glare
    and flooded like rain through cracks in walls

    Dissociated and disoriented,
    with the question of time tickling my veins,
    a wetness, unwarranted,
    puddled against my blink in waterfalls

    The frozen orb was white and icy;
    I again eyed it with intent,
    and inhaled it, for the sake of sobriety,
    breathing in the chill hanging in the halls

    And then I swallowed down the Arctic
    and bit the frostbite from the hands of God.
    Snow teased the Earth, and with one drunken lick
    I braced my mouth and consumed it all

    Plus dark peace and quiet, raw finesse,
    I ingested every heat's undoing.
    Cold belongs in my blood best.
    Warmth rest in me? It never shall​
  2. jonstark

    jonstark Well-Known Member

    Thanks for posting this!
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    :blink: Oh my! That is powerful! The imagery and metaphors are wonderful: "the question of time tickling my veins" and " bit the frostbite from the hands of God" - talk about chills [literally] going up and down one's spine!

    Oh my! :eek:hmy::blink: Well done!
  4. nagisa

    nagisa Chat & Forum Buddy Staff Alumni

    This is so good!! :hug: Thank you for posting this.
  5. danni

    danni Chat Buddy

    very well writtin out hun :hug:
  6. Terry

    Terry Antiquities Friend Staff Alumni

    HOLY SHIT Rae fucking marvellous!!! :smile:
  7. forlorn

    forlorn Staff Alumni

    this is fantastic, well done Raeface keep it up:wink:

    all we need in life are friends that care:biggrin
  8. It pretty much fer-EAKs me out...with empathy (along with rage, fright, and the intrepidness of such states. JEEZUS but you nailed it down!) :blink:

    (EVEN if 'circumstances' are/were different - YIKES!!)
  9. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    Your words are much appreciated, peoples. :smile:
  10. Epical Taylz

    Epical Taylz Well-Known Member

    wowza, that diffinatly sent chills down my spine

    so intense :]
  11. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    Fab poem, i love it :hug:
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