Get out of my life.. </3

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Element, Feb 7, 2006.

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  1. Element

    Element Member

    I gaze upon the shining sky,
    and I hear that voice in my head.
    Why can't you leave me alone I ask,
    Sometimes I wish you were dead.

    You hurt me so much I can't take it,
    I want to scream out to the world.
    Then maybe my point will be taken,
    Get out of my life.

    Why can't anyone understand,
    there are times in life not worth living.
    The urge to cry makes life even worse,
    Get out of my life. </3

    Out of all the poems this one hardly shows my feelings, not to mention I couldn't think of any better line that "Get out of my life." Oh well, hopefully some of you might enjoy it..x
  2. indie_freak

    indie_freak Guest

    I like it, it's short and too the point. I hate it when people get distracted from the point of their poem by trying to make the wording more complicated. It's good keep posting your poems.
  3. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    I was a really good poem...I hope to read more from you!
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    I enjoyed reading this :hug:
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