going off the top of my head

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by bobbob, Jul 4, 2016.

  1. bobbob

    bobbob Well-Known Member

    I thought Id write a poem
    Right off my noisy head
    I thought Id write a poem
    Straight in this SF thread
    I thought Id write a poem
    About the darkness closing in
    I thought Id write poem
    About the hole that Im in.
    I thought Id write poem
    I thought it might just help
    It thought Id write a poem
    About the hand Id been dealt
    I though Id write a poem
    Its the worst I ever wrote
    I thought Id write a poem
    About how I missed the boat.
    I thought Id write a poem
    About how I want to cry
    I thought Id write a poem
    About how I fear goodbye.
    I thought Id write a poem
    About how the noises claw
    I though Id write poem
    About how I am no more.
    I thought Id write a poem
    About how I really tried
    I thought Id write a poem
    But I think Im dead inside
     
  2. SinisterKid

    SinisterKid Safety & Support SF Supporter

    The worst you ever wrote? I seriously doubt that. I seriously like what you have done with this, the repeated refrain works very well.
     
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  3. bobbob

    bobbob Well-Known Member

    Thanks sinisterkid. :)
     
  4. Brian777

    Brian777 Safety and Support Forum Pro SF Supporter

    Hey Bob my brother, good job. I only wish you didn't have that reason to write it. The severe tinnitus you suffer has to be unbearable, I still hope there is something that can be done to relieve your suffering. It's a two sides coin, if it wasn't for our suffering we'd never have met and become friends. But I'd give that up for your healing. Bless you
    Brian
     
  5. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    :( poems really good bobbob