Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by curtius, Jan 15, 2006.

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  1. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member

    Sullen, unreceptive
    Broken, no perspective
    Stale, dry emotions
    Left, no devotion
    Alone, seeking, reaching
    Someone replys weakly
    An empty hand offered
    For ones selfish profit
    Pushing, enforceing
    Tightening their corset
    Trying to force it
    Fight in return
    Beg them to learn
    Plead them to go
    Leave you alone
    Still they insist
    Shove iron fist
    Makeing you choke
    The words in your throat
    They'll never give in
    'Till you let them win
    They want what they came for
    Persist 'till the end
    No use in debateing
    No difference in waiting
    Just let them keep going
    Let them keep knowing
    Thinking they're right
    Fighting their fight
    In all of their holiness
    Banish your loneliness
    By power they're blinded
    Until you remind them
    You can't be unbroken
    The anger you've spoken
    It wont be forgiven
    Your dead among living
    Be the one to let go
    Let them all know
    Throw peace in their face
    Fling fate through their faith
    Be the one to let go
    Put the blade in its place
    Let them all know
    The end wins the race
    Let them all know
    That pain sets the pace
    Show them their sorrow
    By your dyeing grace...

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  2. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member


    line 37 typo...should read "You're dead..."

    God dont you mods know what this does to a perfectionist???


  3. Wonderstuff

    Wonderstuff Staff Alumni

    Longer edit mode? And I don't think that has anything to do with even the admin (because it has nothing to do with me, lol, trust me), I think it's to do with VBulletin. You could try taking it up with them if you want I guess.
  4. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    Don't worry about it, I can see past typos, it really is a wonderful poem! I wish that I could write poetry as good as that...

  5. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member


    Just sounding off...I HATE IT when I miss a typo...irritates me for days.

    Dont get me wrong - I LOVE OUR MODS!!!

  6. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member

    Its giveing me a tick.....


    Thanks for reading.

  7. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    I like it :)
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