Heart In a Box

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  1. TheLoneWolf

    TheLoneWolf Well-Known Member

    i'd give you my heart if i could
    i kept it in a box
    saving it for someone like you

    as i carried that box
    someone tripped me and
    i dropped the box
    i checked it to make sure that
    it was still okay
    it had a crack in it but
    i thought that i could mend it

    as i carried the box
    i found someone like you
    and i asked her if she would
    carry it for me

    she said no, i thank you for the offer but
    i'm not really interested
    and the crack in my heart
    widened a bit

    i walked a ways further
    and came upon someone
    who said that she would take the box
    she seemed nice enough
    so i gave it to her
    but when she gave it back
    my heart was in a thousand pieces

    i was devastated
    a crack i knew i could mend
    but now it was shattered
    how could i ever hope to fix it?

    and then i met someone
    who said she could fix it
    so i gave it to her
    and hoped for the best

    some time later
    she came back to me and said
    'i'm sorry, i tried to fix your heart
    but it seems to be too broken'
    she handed me the box and inside
    the thousand pieces were now a million

    i kept my heart in a box
    saving it for someone like you
    i'd give it to you if i could but
    all i have now is
    a box full of dust
  2. antino

    antino Member

    It's a touching poem. I liked it. Thanks.
  3. TheLoneWolf

    TheLoneWolf Well-Known Member

    Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I realize it doesn't rhyme or anything... it's not my best work, but then, I haven't really written anything in years. It was just kind of a feeble attempt to get back into writing poetry. Hopefully I'll be able to produce something better on the next go around. But it's nice to know that you didn't think it sucked or anything. :smile:
  4. antino

    antino Member

    The story of the poem was very recognisable. That's one of the reasons why it is touching for me. :)
  5. TheLoneWolf

    TheLoneWolf Well-Known Member

    I think it's something a lot of people have experienced... waiting for that special someone but having their heart broken so many times before they find it... every time it becomes harder and harder to love again. In fact it's probably something that we all have gone through.
  6. WildCherry

    WildCherry Staff Member ADMIN

    It's beautiful!! A poem doesn't have to rhyme to convey its point. I can relate to it too... I think so many of us can. I'm glad you shared it, and I hope to get to read more of your writing!
  7. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Eccentric writer, general weirdo, heedless heathen

    That was really good...thanks for sharing :) Your poetry does not suck, it's better than mine lol.
  8. TheLoneWolf

    TheLoneWolf Well-Known Member

    Aww, thanks guys :smile:

    I wish I still had some of the stuff I wrote years ago... it was much better. But I'll try to keep writing as I feel inspired to do so.
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