Heartbroken now... poem I just did, comments would be nice. :(

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    FORgot to put that in title

    May trigger!!

    Broken inside,
    tears crawling down my soft, warm skin,
    thinking of the times,
    times we were together,
    times we talked to each other,
    all gone down the drain,
    my fault,
    I know,
    always my fault,
    right now, I feel so cold,
    cold and dead, inside my head,
    death, I stink of,
    yet still breathing,
    breathing the air, the air around me,
    I ask myself, why did I let you leave?
    I loved you, still do,
    with all my heart, but it's torn apart,
    broken and shattered,
    neglected and battered,
    I feel so worn out,
    so tired,
    what else is there to do,
    when almost everything is dead inside of you,
    tears race down my cheeks,
    blood drips down me,
    but as far as I can see,
    I am dead as can be,
    but still breathing,
    the air around me,
    I want you back,
    your name is Jake,
    I think of you when I awake,
    waking from a dream about me and you,
    but now that's down the drain too,
    no more me,
    no more you,
    not anymore,
    we can't be,
    can't be 'we',
    can't be 'us',
    I feel so lost,
    without you, I wonder,
    I wonder who,
    who am I?
    With you I believed I was something,
    but now I think who am I?
    Just a girl, a thing infact,
    a thing which cuts herself,
    destroys herself,
    yet still breathing,
    not dead yet,
    just broken and bruised,
    bleeding and all the time,
    I always loose,
    I want you back Jake,
    I thought your heart belonged to me,
    but everyone else left,
    and just like them, you did too,
    thinking won't help,
    just makes it worse,
    but just know one thing,
    I love you,
    with all my heart,
    and I want you back,
    I'm sorry for what I am,
    how I am,
    who I am,
    but Jake, know this,
    I love you,
    forever and ever,
    and ever,
    and ever...

    :sad: :cry: :sad:
    Last edited: Aug 5, 2007
  2. amroth

    amroth Active Member

    Heya, good poem it has a lot of emotion in it and...I know what's happened and what may be running around inside of your head right now. You are a passionate person with A LOT of feeling. And I can tell this by your words I'm so sorry that you two seemed to have broken up. I feel sort of guilty for jynxing it =(. But you are a strong person, I can tell. You can get through anything, you just have to believe it. If you need someone to talk to feel free to IM me anytime on aim my sn is Lycoprw . Stay strong, please.
  3. Blackness

    Blackness Guest

    I loved it! you're so talented. I hope Jake comes back! for your sake :)
  4. expressive_child

    expressive_child Well-Known Member

    Wow...emotional and vibrant. Good one!
  5. thanks expressive, and blackness.

    amroth, didnt jynx anything...
    thanks aswell...
    i just want him back. :cry: so bad.
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