Heavens on its way.

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by forlorn, Apr 9, 2009.

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  1. forlorn

    forlorn Staff Alumni

    Excess will surely kill me..
    Puddles gather rain..
    Devoid of all attention..
    Inwards I remain..
    This is me..
    What you see, is the inside..
    I can feel this day..
    Im like an animal in pain..
    Shoot me down..
    Wipe my frown..
    Then heavens on its way.
     
  2. forlorn

    forlorn Staff Alumni

    Just one reply would be nice lol :blink:
     
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Forlorn, I'm sorry. I didn't read this until now...I like it. (It sounds like it could be lyrics for a song. The rhymes are good and the rhythm is well paced.)
     
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    :hug: good poem!
     
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