Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by thesemomentsastheypass, Jul 22, 2007.

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  1. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    I've been away for some time. I thought there was no more poet's corner. But here it is. I don't know if the same people are here any more. Hello reader, whoever you are.

    my former GF and I drove the length and breadth of the country. And marked our route on a giant map: red going out, blue coming back. Just so you know.

    Last time we truly connected,
    had something, felt it
    we sat beneath a snow shower
    of stars gazing skyward
    in the car.

    Through villages, towns,
    driving a red-pen line
    to the farthest tips,
    your hand always in mine
    your name, shaping my lips

    Skipping cities, sitting
    in cafes catching floor-
    rainbow moments.
    Lapping lakes, memorials
    making love, time,

    And you, as changeable
    as weather. Miles
    rolling away with the
    approaching darkness. Smiles
    left in lay-bys. Apathy.

    I had us down as in sync,
    on track. But the ugly truth-
    clue lingered perhaps
    in the blue, blue line
    that traced us back.
  2. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    Oh my goodness! This is terrific. Well done. :clap:
  3. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    you are very kind. Thank you.
  4. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    Quite my pleasure.
  5. BelovedDreamer

    BelovedDreamer Well-Known Member


    And welcome back.
  6. eih

    eih Well-Known Member

    wow you are a fantastic poet
  7. Spearmint

    Spearmint Well-Known Member

    Oh that's great. :biggrin: Nice work.
  8. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    is there an 'overwhelmed' smiley on here?
  9. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member

    As always you tie the beginning to your end...

    I have missed you old friend

    Still reading, still breathing

  10. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    Hey you,

    Much love.

    Drop me a line,

    should you feel inclined.
  11. Darkness N Light

    Darkness N Light Staff Alumni

    Wow I loved the poem. Welcome back sweetie. I like the way you tied it in with what went on while you were gone. Of course we still have the poet's corner. You do not think that we are gonna let Robin take it out do you? I hope to see more of your writing soon. Take care and I love you. :hug: :cheekkiss :hug: :cheekkiss :hug: :cheekkiss :hug: :cheekkiss

    With Love,
    Crystal :hug: :cheekiss
  12. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    thank you so much for responding.

    and remembering.

    I'm home. :loopy:
  13. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Breathtakingly beautiful!:eek:hmy:

    Welcome back indeed:smile:
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