highway to abandon

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  1. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    Reflecting bottles leave my features shattered
    We crack before the force of our own stares
    The emptiness weaves sullen colored banners
    Battered by a storm that splits the shared

    Arguments riot in the eardrums
    Both past and present crash in conscious drive
    Wheels kept steady swerve without a reason
    While bodies slam on every side

    Invited lovers' tongues intrude as serpents
    Consuming every word conceived by thought
    Loving seats erupt in flames of rage spent
    The fireworks of a dream have dimmed and gone

    A highway to the streets reveals the distance
    Rooftop rows divide the coming years
    No signs of open arms, familiar faces
    My searching eyes are blurred by morning beers
     
  2. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    Seriously, this is amazing; the structure, the concept, everything. Brilliant emotion.

    I love the fourth stanza, particularly the very last line.

    Thanks for sharing. :smile:
     
  3. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. A lot of people I show it to don't know what to say about it!
     
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    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

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