hot kitchen, when to conform, approach & be helped

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by pit, May 16, 2007.

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  1. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    Hot Kitchen

    I couldn't stand the heat,
    So I got out of the kitchen
    Thank you,
    Mr. Corpse Cleaner-upper,
    For braving the stench
    And handling the filth
    So heroically.

    When To Conform

    To keep my balls off the chopping block,
    I'll join the religion everyone else believes in.

    Approach & Be Helped

    Hello, may I help you?
    Sir, are you being helped?
    Are you being helped or hurt in any way?

    (let them be served, let them be helped)
    Maybe this is a good addition to your addendum...
    (so that someday, we all may be helped)

    "No thanks.
    You see, I'm happy.
    I'm already happy with what I have."

    But are you happy enough?
    (help, serve)
  2. BelovedDreamer

    BelovedDreamer Well-Known Member

    Hmmm...interesting, good rhythm and I like the structure
  3. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    You're really SUCH a talented writer.

    I enjoyed each of these. Flawless structure. Brilliant concepts. :clap:
  4. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    I'm glad you enjoyed these as well! I'm glad I could share these pieces with you guys.
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