i am nothing

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Sadeyes, Feb 27, 2006.

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  1. Sadeyes

    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

    Again, this is a poem written about a year ago, when my depression was the deepest, and my prospects for living were slim, and again, I feel blessed to be who I am today:

    i am nothing

    i have no voice.
    i have no rights.
    i have no way to feel.

    i have no pride.
    i have no worth.
    i think i am not real.

    i cannot yell.
    i cannot cry.
    i cannot tell a soul.

    i cannot live.
    i have not died.
    i’m only growing old.

    i am not here,
    the time is vague,
    i do not have a plan.

    i hate my life.
    i hate my fate.
    i hate the thing I am.

    it is horrific
    to feel like
    to never even count.

    i cut my wrists
    i bang my head,
    to let the venom out.
  2. Isa

    Isa Well-Known Member

    Very simple but effective. Well done =(
  3. Sadeyes

    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

    It is an entendre on Dr Seuss....of course with a twist...thanks Nightmares
  4. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    that was so simple, and powerful, it let out your feelings very well!

    Great Job, like always!

    Love BP
  5. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni


    I loved it very much.:wow: :hug: :clap: Yes, and I noticed the Dr Seuss-thing.:wink: It's brilliantly clear from your poem how horribly low you were feeling. The feelings so vividly described are depressing, but it's not depressing overall as an excellent poem. Does that make sense??:blink: It's very succinct, doesn't waste any words, but doesn't leave out a single feeling. Really really like it.:smile: And I'm glad you don't feel that way now!:smile: :smile:

    Sooz xoxoxox
  6. Sadeyes

    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

    Sooze...I truly have a macabre sense of humor, which has gotten me through a whole pile of life's ugliness...thanks for noticing...fondly, Jackie
  7. Jenny

    Jenny Staff Alumni

    :hug: the words 'i am nothing' and 'jackie' simply do not belong together. this is a great poem.. im glad that you're no longer in that frame of mind.. please remember that i love you lots and always here if you need me :hug:
  8. Sadeyes

    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

    Hi Jen..Tres touching...Love ya, Jackie
  9. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    great writing x
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    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

  11. Dudly

    Dudly Well-Known Member

    I liked it. Very well done. I especially like the fact that you didn't capitalize your "i's". It adds to the poem's concept.
  12. pittfall

    pittfall Active Member

    In between here and there
  13. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Love it can relate to it very effective.
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