i dont usually do this but what the heck...

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by notwanting2live, Oct 19, 2008.

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  1. notwanting2live

    notwanting2live Well-Known Member

    im not a very creative person, but i just feel like writing tonight. so here goes... :blink:
    Im staring into darkness
    Just thinking
    My eyes are watering, but not crying
    Im not even blinking

    The feeling that Im having
    Is to much the same
    That Im always having
    The feeling of blame

    I keep on wishing
    That I can be taken away
    From all the pain and misery
    And for happiness to stay

    I don't understand
    What my head is saying
    Everything is so confusing
    That my soul is paying

    Hurt, Lost, Lonely and Afraid
    This is what I am living
    Whilst others are living thier dreams
    So why does the abusers keep on giving.
    Dont know what people think of this i dont think its very good, as i suck at basically every thing creative but its what was in my head so hey what the heck! :unsure:

  2. aki

    aki Well-Known Member

    it's good! :smile: write more, it helps.
  3. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    This has a good flow. Change the ending to Why DO the abusers keep on giving. Fine job!
  4. notwanting2live

    notwanting2live Well-Known Member


    He's there
    In the distance
    But also so so close
    Where will he be next?

    Hes in my head today
    But not in my heart
    I cant forget his face
    I cant forget his force

    Ive tried reaching out
    It hasnt worked
    Why dont you believe me?
    Why do you believe him?

    Im not a little gal anymore
    You cant hurt me
    But still I fear you
    And I still feel you near

    Hes next to me
    Hes hurting me time after time again
    Hes still in my head
    Then I wake up

    its not the best but i aint good at this stuff
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