I try.....

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by miserableboi, Feb 19, 2006.

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  1. miserableboi

    miserableboi New Member

    Forgetting Death


    Tears trickling
    Tears rolling down pale skin
    People sitting, watching
    Where should I begin?

    The black all around
    Keeps control, keeps you bound
    Black abyss rejecting sound

    Early Monday I awoke
    Thinking of pain, about to choke
    I noticed the sun was shining in
    I quickly hid, not to burn my skin

    Yellow dancing on the wall
    Was if bugs began to crawl

    What led up to my death was pain
    As if my soul was in the rain
    Drowning, gasping, thirsty for air
    My life is so unbearably unfair

    In the mirror I always stare
    Feeling lifeless, and emotionally bare
    A reflection I do not know
    Just eyes aglow

    No face just a silhouette
    While my brain began to forget

    Forget names and family
    Forget pictures; forget nature
    Forget love
    Overlook emotion
    All have lost purpose


    Screams, cries, prayer
    The people crowd, the sky grows grayer
    I get closer to see the fuss
    I couldn’t break the stillness

    I finally make my way around
    I stood there feeling dumfound

    What I saw was a casket of blue
    I got closer I still had no clue
    When I got very near
    I felt a anguished tear

    I finally got a good look
    What happened next
    As if out of a book
    As if my pain in text

    I stood staring at myself
    I was astonished of my death
    I thought it was just a bad dream
    My life I couldn’t redeem….
     
  2. Abacus21

    Abacus21 Staff Alumni

    That poems great :)

    I love the way it sounds :)
     
  3. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    That was a great poem hun! I really really really liked it...

    I hope you will write more...

    Love BP
     
  4. Hi

    Welcome to the forum :) It is a good poem :) I am sorry if you feel like this suggests - so much pain....


    Am always here for you and hope to see more of your writing

    Love

    Sarah
    x
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    Great poem!! :hug:
     
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