I wear lipstick in the bath

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by ConfusedSilence, May 13, 2011.

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  1. ConfusedSilence

    ConfusedSilence Well-Known Member

    I wear lipstick in the bath
    While the cherry swirls around me
    And my sticks, logs, sting like burns
    Of fire licking my blubber
    And ache, like me, for hours after

    My skin weeps and my eyes sweat
    And the shower blisters my knees
    I am temporarily ended
    But for the stinging
    And the aching

    But it is good
    Pain, my ally, remembers me
    And is a feeling
    Fleeting, like me

    Like feeling pretty
    When I wear lipstick in the bath.
     
  2. NoMoneyToPlease

    NoMoneyToPlease Banned Member

    So bittersweet....and lovely. :)
     
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    I like how you've started the poem with the image of lipstick and tied it back in at the very end - with a very concise, emotional twist. A very evocative poem for images and feeling. Nicely done!
     
  4. ConfusedSilence

    ConfusedSilence Well-Known Member

    Thank you. :')

    Ironically, I just bombed my English exam.
     
  5. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Poetry comes from the soul/center of oneself. Exams don't and can't measure that.
     
  6. ConfusedSilence

    ConfusedSilence Well-Known Member

    I agree, but try telling that to any university.
     
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