I wish I was the Magritte of poetry.

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Surely Not, Jun 30, 2010.

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  1. Surely Not

    Surely Not Well-Known Member

    Spilled salt and
    leftover dinners
    smudged the muted walls,
    and you mentioned how
    that subdued green had once been
    much more vibrant.

    Silverware clanged in overtime,
    as it worked to cover our past-due
    silence.
    And cheap ceramic plates,
    smeared with unused condiments,
    became pallets
    for the wastepaper tablecloth beneath us.

    The napkin dispensers reflected
    a distorted version of you,
    your features creating
    a perfect Picasso.
     
  2. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    Reminds me of the sharp angles that Picasso used to paint his masterpieces.

    :hamster:
     
  3. Things

    Things Well-Known Member

    I really liked the tone of this. I can pictured it so well. I also like how it's all open for interpretations, the kind of poem that makes you stop and think about it.

    Personally, I interpreted it to be about how two people drifted apart, but try to pretend that everything's fine ("And cheap ceramic plates" made me think this). As they grow further and further, they could barely recognize the other anymore (Picasso is famous for abstract, so while the know who the person is, it seems like everything has become changed and distorted).
     
  4. Domo

    Domo Well-Known Member

    I also really liked this.

    Would love to see some more :)
     
  5. Surely Not

    Surely Not Well-Known Member

    Thank you guys so much!

    Things -- That's pretty much exactly what I intended when I wrote it. It's nice that someone picked up on that. :)
     
  6. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    I really enjoyed this. Your words painted a wonderful picture - physically and emotionally. Liked these lines a lot: Silverware clanged in overtime, / as it worked to cover our past-due / silence.
     
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