I wrote a poem, can you tell me what you think?

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Okay I'm Jenny and I'm 17 years old. Heeere it is..

I never believed that love
Could do such a crazy thing
Resorted me to poetry
While I cry, write, sing.
Living this life
Where I see only one
One person before me
The rest are done.
Why do I fall for the one
Everyone talks about?
If I didn’t want to hear
I’d have to get out.
My heart is racing
My palms drenched in sweat
This is how I felt
Even when we first met.
It sounds very cliché
I’ve heard this all before
But only when you feel it
You realise it, for sure.
I love my best friend
And that’s not the worst
She’s a girl, as am I
And she’s not the first.
I thought she was perfect
Though she broke my heart
I saw past her flaws
This was the easy part.
She understood me to start
She realised love is hard
She told me she wasn’t gay
As I let down my heart’s guard.
I let days go by
With her knowing it all
I trusted her with my secret
I then let myself fall.
It was all a trick
She’s a joke of a friend
I can’t help but hate her now
There’s nothing left to mend.
She cares for no one but herself
She wants to be in the right
But I see her now
In an appalling light.
I don’t care if she shares
My secret with the school
If I were to be asked
I would reply, you fool!
I would continue to exclaim
I never loved that bitch!
She’s a horrible person
A supposed Pagan Witch!
It’s sad to then think
After all this anger and hate
That I actually still love her
Even if she isn’t my mate.
 

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You have a real knack for expressing your feelings in your poem. Also don't be ashamed of being gay! It is now adays most gays have come out of the closet. My neice has been gay all thru high school and didn't give a damn who knew. Her only problem was she picked a phsyco bitch from hell to be her girlfriend. They use to get into fist fights with each other all the time. Take Care and Stand Proud of who you are!!~Joseph~
 
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