I wrote a poem, can you tell me what you think?

Discussion in 'Suicidal Thoughts and Feelings' started by loljenny91, Dec 21, 2008.

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  1. loljenny91

    loljenny91 Member

    Okay I'm Jenny and I'm 17 years old. Heeere it is..

    I never believed that love
    Could do such a crazy thing
    Resorted me to poetry
    While I cry, write, sing.
    Living this life
    Where I see only one
    One person before me
    The rest are done.
    Why do I fall for the one
    Everyone talks about?
    If I didn’t want to hear
    I’d have to get out.
    My heart is racing
    My palms drenched in sweat
    This is how I felt
    Even when we first met.
    It sounds very cliché
    I’ve heard this all before
    But only when you feel it
    You realise it, for sure.
    I love my best friend
    And that’s not the worst
    She’s a girl, as am I
    And she’s not the first.
    I thought she was perfect
    Though she broke my heart
    I saw past her flaws
    This was the easy part.
    She understood me to start
    She realised love is hard
    She told me she wasn’t gay
    As I let down my heart’s guard.
    I let days go by
    With her knowing it all
    I trusted her with my secret
    I then let myself fall.
    It was all a trick
    She’s a joke of a friend
    I can’t help but hate her now
    There’s nothing left to mend.
    She cares for no one but herself
    She wants to be in the right
    But I see her now
    In an appalling light.
    I don’t care if she shares
    My secret with the school
    If I were to be asked
    I would reply, you fool!
    I would continue to exclaim
    I never loved that bitch!
    She’s a horrible person
    A supposed Pagan Witch!
    It’s sad to then think
    After all this anger and hate
    That I actually still love her
    Even if she isn’t my mate.
     
  2. Angelo_91

    Angelo_91 Well-Known Member

    nice unrequited love poem, reminds me of the past. good luck
     
  3. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    beautiful :heart:
     
  4. LenaLunacy

    LenaLunacy Well-Known Member

    I love it :)
     
  5. gentlelady

    gentlelady Staff Alumni

    Well done. :)
     
  6. crookxshanks

    crookxshanks Well-Known Member

    really like it
     
  7. MeAndYou

    MeAndYou Well-Known Member

    I really like it as well. Hopefully writing can be 1 way for you to get through hard times.
     
  8. Stranger1

    Stranger1 Forum Buddy & Antiquities Friend

    You have a real knack for expressing your feelings in your poem. Also don't be ashamed of being gay! It is now adays most gays have come out of the closet. My neice has been gay all thru high school and didn't give a damn who knew. Her only problem was she picked a phsyco bitch from hell to be her girlfriend. They use to get into fist fights with each other all the time. Take Care and Stand Proud of who you are!!~Joseph~
     
  9. Dave_N

    Dave_N Guest

    That was a very nice poem jenny. I'm sorry that it didn't work out with that girl. :hug:
     
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