If I die here

Discussion in 'Rants, Musings and Ideas' started by StevenSiew, Jun 8, 2013.

  1. StevenSiew

    StevenSiew Well-Known Member

    We'll do it all
    Everything
    On our own

    We don't need
    Anything
    Or anyone

    If I die here
    If I just die here
    <against guidelines>

    I don't quite know
    How to say
    How I feel

    Those three words
    Are said too much
    They're not enough

    If I die here
    If I just die here
    <against guidelines>

    Forget what we're told
    Before we get too old
    Show me a garden that's bursting into life

    Don't waste time
    Chasing dreams
    Around our heads

    I need your grace
    To remind me
    To find my own

    If I die here
    If I just die here
    Would you die with me and just forget the world?

    Forget what we’re told
    Before we get too old
    Show me a garden that's bursting into life

    All that I am
    All that I ever was
    Is here in your perfect eyes, they're all I can see

    I don't know where
    Confused about how as well
    Just know that these things will never change for us at all

    If I die here
    If I just die here
    <against guidelines>

    Note on editing: As much as I do not like to edit a poem, I felt I needed to because of the nature of that line. Can you please restate it?
     
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  2. meaningless-vessel

    meaningless-vessel Well-Known Member

    A rewrite from a snow patrol song... Just replacing one word with another?