Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by TinkerLoop, May 25, 2009.

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  1. TinkerLoop

    TinkerLoop Well-Known Member

    If i cried today
    would you tell me its okay?
    If you knew my mistakes
    would you make me pay?
    If you saw me cut
    would you runaway?
    If you saw me hurting
    would you make me stay?
    If i took all the pill
    would it change all the grey?
    If i died today
    what would you say?
    If i breathed my last breath
    would you let it be my last day?
  2. fromthatshow

    fromthatshow Staff Alumni

  3. The Scream

    The Scream Well-Known Member


    beautiful :cry:
  4. Jehuty

    Jehuty Senior Member

  5. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    I love the rhyme pattern and the emotions are profound.:goodjob:
  6. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

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