Ill at ease

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by pither, Oct 6, 2009.

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  1. pither

    pither Well-Known Member

    Tripping on the egg shells-
    I so often tiptoe through
    Finding you are not so calm
    And lack the patients I once knew.

    You used to understand me
    You used to sooth my nerves
    But now even my simple breathing-
    Is something too absurd. ​
     
  2. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    I like it! :heart:
     
  3. kurenai

    kurenai Well-Known Member

    Interesting! I like how the last two lines can indicate that the narrator's breathing is 'something absurd' to just the narrator, or the narrator and the other person, and the feeling that you are lighter than an egg shell, and it is an obstacle that can send you to the ground.
     
  4. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    very well written i like it very much
     
  5. pither

    pither Well-Known Member

    Thank you all very much for the kind words
     
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