Ill be gone

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by ThornThatNeverHeals, Jan 20, 2012.

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  1. ThornThatNeverHeals

    ThornThatNeverHeals Well-Known Member

    Last night i had a few great conversations... but too many not so great ones... i feel like such a problem, but people are too busy trying to save my feelings to just spit out the truth... i guess one did last night, was it right do respond how i did? im so tired of this... i just want to be able to disappear. Some people hate me but as least they spit it out... the ones who just try to slowly push away, till you no longer talk.... thats where it hurts... you have to look back and go... what did i do... could i have done more... am i that bad of a person... to which the last one, the answer is always yes. so to those of you who want me gone, just tell me, and here is my promise:

    I write to you,
    I try to talk,
    I have such a hard time,
    but I try so much.

    You seem bored with me,
    only faint replies are given
    I feel like I’m forcing each word,
    why do you feel such?

    what do I do wrong?
    how come I'm not better?
    I dont understand anymore
    I just want to give up.

    I would try to talk,
    people make it seem like such a chore though,
    I just dont understand.
    why is it so tough?

    I'll leave you be,
    I'll go away,
    I promise,
    I'm gone now.

    I'll live on,
    or I'll die soon,
    it doesn’t matter anymore,
    not when, nor how.
     
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    I like your poem...How it all ties in.

    Equally important, though, is what you said to preface the poem. You "had a few great conversations." Even one great conversation mixed in with many not so great ones is an achievement! Sounds to me like you are worrying about how others perceive you as you try to communicate. Simple expression and honesty can work wonders. Maybe focus on saying what you mean, listening to what others are saying, and asking for clarification if you're not sure what they mean, and during a conversation do less "worrying." Your poem expresses your ideas and feelings really well, so I'm sure you could have the same openness in conversation. Stay well and safe. :hug:
     
  3. JustFirefly

    JustFirefly Well-Known Member

    This was great thorn, I hope whatever happened last night wasn't to bad. I wish i could express my feelings that openly in my poetry. Mines always riddled with rhymes, secrets, and the like.
     
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