Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Krem, Sep 28, 2010.

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  1. Krem

    Krem Well-Known Member

    "The time has come to purge!"
    Screamed the leader
    The arch-angel
    "Evil has spread on Earth, brothers!
    We must stop it! Eradicate it! Annihilate it!"
    The Host knew it to be true
    Knew him to be true
    Yet they hesitated
    For is it not through the Dark that Light will shine?
    The younger ones joined him
    Eager to fight, to save
    The older ones hesitated, shaked their heads
    But joined aswell
    The Throne had been silent for æons

    "This is our time!" it snarled
    Gnarled little creature
    Dark little creature
    It was a twisted mockery of life
    A dead, brittle husk
    But it was wise, cunning
    "They seek to drive us out, drive us through!
    But we have a right to live! We shall fight them, tooth and nail!"
    Its hellish comrades howled with it, each more twisted than the other
    They were eager to take their revenge upon the beings of Light
    "Who are they to deny us what they have? Who are they to deny us joy?"

    Mortals continued, unaware of deeper, higher things
    They were content in their mundane lives
    They all crave something, but do not know what

    This is a WIP. The title is probably going to change. I built this up to be something, and I won't be able to finish it any time soon, for I can't deliver the awesomeness this build-up demands. :p
  2. mulberrypie

    mulberrypie Well-Known Member

    oooohh i like it. it's dark and intense. kinda like a passage from dante's inferno.
  3. Krem

    Krem Well-Known Member

    I've not read that yet, but from what I've gathered.. no. And not just because it's better written, haha. There, it's a man travelling, and describing what he sees, as he is guided by Virgil. Mine was suposed to be an objective description of a war between heaven, hell, and earth, with each side with different views, each view seeming to be right, and yet conflicting with the others. But, as I said, I'll not be able to deliver. But, 'dark and intense' is a pretty hefty compliment. :)

    And, to show the difference of quality, here're parts from 'Inferno'--
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