In the worst way

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  1. Lizzy17

    Lizzy17 Member

    I wish I was
    to be found
    It's the most of my frown
    drowning with me
    the world above me
    Is my God all gone
    In the worst way

    I wish I was
    To be loved
    Is there any left for me
    It's unfound
    Maybe held down

    Is there life
    to be found
    In the worst way
    Is this the only way
    Can't be any left for me

    I see myself fall down
    not a sound, not one found
    Yet their souls make pleas
    all around me
    I dry up so quickly

    I fall through my soul
    filtered out, until no more
    There is nothing to be found
    In the worst way
    In the worst way
     
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    This expresses a lot of intense emotion. I like the way the end repeats the title twice - it adds to the emotional impact.
     
  3. innocencexisxlove

    innocencexisxlove Well-Known Member

    this i so good lizzy.
    i really like it

    and im not much for poetry ;)
     
  4. kurenai

    kurenai Well-Known Member

    Awesome! Very interesting, intense, and also sad. It needs... a cinnamon bun.
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Brilliant poem. :smile:
     
  6. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    It depicts your despair and saddness I hope soon you can write of your victory over these things. Well written piece thanks
     
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